Comments | flawsrevenge: fic: At this altar

flawsrevenge

fic: At this altar

May 30, 2008 18:43

Title: At this altar
Fandom: Prison Break
Characters: Michael/Sara
Word Count: 600 or so
Rating: yeah...um...the point of this challenge was NC-17, and um...NC-17 implied? does that count?
Warning: see rating, also, excessive schmoop
Notes: Written for the challenge "Let's get it on" at
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birthdays, prison break, fic

Comments 26

wrldpossibility May 31 2008, 02:16:50 UTC

She never wants anything to come between them again, not space or time or prisons or even clothes.

*nods* Sound like a perfect plan, Sara!

This was beautiful. I love the way you describe Michael's study of her (with the hints of LLI) from Sara's POV. That's unique, and a wonderful idea!

flawsrevenge June 1 2008, 04:57:14 UTC

It does sound like a good plan, doesn't it? Now if only it were August...

Thank you! I enjoyed trying to get into Sara's head a little.

msgenevieve May 31 2008, 02:49:54 UTC

I thing I might be a little bit in love with this story.

He follows with lips, kissing all the places he’s kissed already with his fingertips, lashes down and studied, like he studies everything. She wonders if he’s taking her apart in his mind, bone and muscle and blood and spirit. She knows he sees it all, but it doesn’t make her nervous, or even slightly self-conscious.

His dexterity is enough to make her swoon, but she resists the fall; she isn’t finished with him yet. Not yet, not ever.

Perfect in more ways than I can explain. Thank you so much.

flawsrevenge June 1 2008, 04:59:43 UTC

Thanks! I'm really glad that you liked it, and that it worked, because, well, I'm not so much with the kissing and the whatnot...well, at least not until Michael and Sara...now I'm not sure what's going on anymore. ;-)

chatty_cat May 31 2008, 03:21:46 UTC

She never wants anything to come between them again, not space or time or prisons or even clothes.

I loved this line. It was a great way of describing their closeness.

Oh and I just looked at your other comments, I guess I'm not the only one who liked it. *g*

I'm Cathy by the way. *waves*

flawsrevenge June 1 2008, 05:03:37 UTC

Hi, Cathy! *waves back*

Now we can only pray that such lines will eventually come true. :-)

chatty_cat June 2 2008, 16:32:04 UTC

Yes, let's pray. *g*

Oh, do you mind if I add you to my friends list so that I can see when you write? This story was great and I don't want to miss any.

flawsrevenge June 2 2008, 16:49:01 UTC

Of course you may friend me! I'll friend you back! Yay friends!

eight8toes May 31 2008, 03:49:38 UTC

"She holds his head in both hands and deepens the kiss, makes little noises in the back of her throat to encourage him."

*swallows*

So, uh, wow. That line had me shivering. Why? Cause I could feel his damn lips on my all along and perhaps I kinda made the same sound she probably made, that's why. lol *is lame*

Very beautiful fic! :)

flawsrevenge June 1 2008, 05:10:45 UTC

Wow, I'm impressed it had that much effect on you. And that's totally not lame, because really, who wouldn't want to...make out...with Michael?

Thank you!

eight8toes June 1 2008, 06:17:31 UTC

I don't know who I want to make out the most with... Michael or Sucre? Hmm.. that's some good thoughts to have before going to bed! hehehe

flawsrevenge June 1 2008, 13:10:52 UTC

Now that IS an interesting thought before bed...or even Lincoln...or all three? Oh dear.

lauratnz May 31 2008, 04:05:10 UTC

Beautiful! I particularly loved your wording of how they took that brief moment, 'breathing each other in'... *sigh* Great work!

flawsrevenge June 1 2008, 05:08:07 UTC

Thanks! They're just so in love, these two. ;-)