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Fic: That Dreary Day in late February

Oct 18, 2006 17:57

Title: That Dreary Day in Late February
Rating: PG
Fandom: Bleach...Ichigo/Orihime

( The butterflies are back, stampeding through her belly like nothing she’s ever felt. Her heart is shivering, quaking in her chest, let me out it screams, let me free. )

the country inside my head, bleach

Comments 26

akuni October 18 2006, 21:13:08 UTC

Very touching, and just sweet enough. :) I like these two together, they can be really cute.

I agree that it needs something a little more satisfying at the end than Ichigo going home, but am not sure what. Their use of their given names is very nicely done, but isn't quite enough. Maybe if he just waited and walked her home, or sat with her quietly? Doesn't have to be a big declaration of love, that would probably spoil the mood. Something, though.

Unless it's supposed to feel that way at the end, in which case nevermind, hehe.

flash_indie October 22 2006, 05:09:38 UTC

Yeah, they are cute, huh? They're one of the few pairings that can make me genuinely squee.

I mentioned this above, but I actually forgot to add that this will more likely than not be continued...in other words, there's more to this fic than what has been posted. Does that make sense?

Thanks for commenting!

fitchpouch October 19 2006, 00:03:08 UTC

Okay.

You are indeed a poet; I can't emphasize that enough. Poetry has rhythm, and I definitely see it there. Such a beautiful, wonderful fic. :)

I can see that everyone else doesn't like the ending, but in a way, it makes sense to me. It leaves Ichigo at his best; more as himself. This way, the story seems all more real and lovely.

anonymous October 19 2006, 00:15:58 UTC

The first time I read this, it didn't quite make an impression. But you know, reading it again made me realize how wonderfully constructed this fic was. You're cool, and I love this.

giethe October 19 2006, 00:16:36 UTC

Ah, I forgot to log in.

flash_indie January 21 2007, 21:25:06 UTC

Thank you.

k_puff October 20 2006, 14:53:48 UTC

Ahh, reading this is going to make me late for school but I just wanted to tell you that I loved it! ^_^ I love the relationship that Ichigo and Orihime have. I've written a bunch of challenges myself at 30_kisses, so it's cool that there's another IchiHime writer out there besides me! XD

flash_indie January 21 2007, 21:22:40 UTC

Agreed. I love the relationship Ichigo and Orihime have too. I'll need to check out your writing! It's so difficult to find IchiHime stuff.

fringe_x1 October 21 2006, 18:53:28 UTC

aw that was incredibly sweet and IC and well written. good job ^^

flash_indie January 21 2007, 21:23:25 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed!