Very touching, and just sweet enough. :) I like these two together, they can be really cute.
I agree that it needs something a little more satisfying at the end than Ichigo going home, but am not sure what. Their use of their given names is very nicely done, but isn't quite enough. Maybe if he just waited and walked her home, or sat with her quietly? Doesn't have to be a big declaration of love, that would probably spoil the mood. Something, though.
Unless it's supposed to feel that way at the end, in which case nevermind, hehe.
Yeah, they are cute, huh? They're one of the few pairings that can make me genuinely squee.
I mentioned this above, but I actually forgot to add that this will more likely than not be continued...in other words, there's more to this fic than what has been posted. Does that make sense?
You are indeed a poet; I can't emphasize that enough. Poetry has rhythm, and I definitely see it there. Such a beautiful, wonderful fic. :)
I can see that everyone else doesn't like the ending, but in a way, it makes sense to me. It leaves Ichigo at his best; more as himself. This way, the story seems all more real and lovely.
The first time I read this, it didn't quite make an impression. But you know, reading it again made me realize how wonderfully constructed this fic was. You're cool, and I love this.
Ahh, reading this is going to make me late for school but I just wanted to tell you that I loved it! ^_^ I love the relationship that Ichigo and Orihime have. I've written a bunch of challenges myself at 30_kisses, so it's cool that there's another IchiHime writer out there besides me! XD
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I agree that it needs something a little more satisfying at the end than Ichigo going home, but am not sure what. Their use of their given names is very nicely done, but isn't quite enough. Maybe if he just waited and walked her home, or sat with her quietly? Doesn't have to be a big declaration of love, that would probably spoil the mood. Something, though.
Unless it's supposed to feel that way at the end, in which case nevermind, hehe.
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I mentioned this above, but I actually forgot to add that this will more likely than not be continued...in other words, there's more to this fic than what has been posted. Does that make sense?
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You are indeed a poet; I can't emphasize that enough. Poetry has rhythm, and I definitely see it there. Such a beautiful, wonderful fic. :)
I can see that everyone else doesn't like the ending, but in a way, it makes sense to me. It leaves Ichigo at his best; more as himself. This way, the story seems all more real and lovely.
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