Dark Before Dawn

[open_embrace]

Credits to everyone who drabbled in the last week - y'all totally inspired me to give this a go again! So yeah, thanks.

Theoretically, more coming later/soon.

Title: Dark Before Dawn
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Comments

Review, as requested

[zach_aingeal]

There's not really a whole lot to critique here. The grammar is fine, the sentence structures are not only good but cohesive - the whole piece is poetic and flowing, even graceful. Of course, this kind of writing would get a bit trying after a while, but perfect for this instance.

Good work :] I would only say be wary of using such descriptive language in other pieces, but only because I don't know yet if you're a dramatic writer or a good one *giggle*

<3 Zach

[bookaddict43]

I like the symbolism of Zoe sitting in the dark and how she eventually changes her clothes. Her fingers knotting in her hair, capture her sense of loss very well. Lovely but sad work.

[sasusc]

You had me crying. Poor, poor Zoe! I never want to write without Wash in the picture. It's just too sad, as is this.

This feels like Zoe, and what Zoe would do if we saw her grieving. Well done.

[open_embrace]

thank you so much! those are high compliments indeed :)

yeah, i still cant believe that Wash died :( he was so happy and alive - how could he be dead?