D.Gray-man. Lavi/Allen.

[finite_farfalla]

So I am too lazy to write properly but still want to tell a story. Here it is. I call it lazy writing, you may call it some butchered incarnation of 1sentence fic, whatever. These numbered themes I use, are in fact, stolen from 1sentence comm, and I write them for the third day's overall prompt, which is Fear. I know it's cheating, I knoooooowww.

Now enjoy some Laven

Comments

[a1y_puff]

Walaupun eyke tak rela sama Laven, but this was good bang, even if you called it lazy writing XD

I like the whole atmosphere and the quiet way you told the story. While the situation is depressing, the quite tone helps so it wasn't overwhelming :D

[nherizu]

Aaaaaaaaaaaw, allen, my allen!! So he kissed Lavi first, huh, good boy. I loved the atmosphere! Laven ♥♥♥♥♥

[isumi_ilde]

This is good. This is really, really good, but there's something that doesn't settle well with me...? Not the LavEn part, I swear =)) It's... idk, the flow? Maybe it's because it's really short, but reading each short part kind of, hmmm? Not abrupt, just--I feel like the flow doesn't go very well with the feelings overflowing from this piece. (????)

IDK I CAN'T EXPLAIN IT WELL I'M SORRY. But otherwise, it's all your usual greatness though--description, word-choices, atmosphere, all great. >Dbd