in medias res. and ah, good ol' eye fucking.

[finite_farfalla]

Secret
A Generation Kill fanfiction.
Summary: FYI Nate is a photojournalist attached to Brad's team.

This is part of ten days challenge that IDK even HOW was born during group messaging session with a1y_puff and nherizu earlier today. First day's prompt is secret.

Comments

[a1y_puff]

I'm not familiar with the fandom ro characters but--I adore your style, which supports the uhh--military feel throughout the story. And I adore your vocab *___* also love the way you phrase some descriptions like "Five men dwarfed by vast, unforgiving desert. The endless sky promised yet another scorching, hot day."

Bagus bang, semangat, lanjutkaaan!

[isumi_ilde]

I HATE EVERY SINGLE ONE OF YOU WHO COULD WRITE IMAGERIES SO WELL /tusukin

I love the contrast--rough atmosphere (???) in the military camp and yet loving air between Nate and Colbert. Also the slow, lazy flow, it really works well. SAMA BAHASA ORANG MILITERNYA HAHAHA spot on banget <3

[nherizu]

Whoa bang. Masih menggigit aja gaya fic militernya. The way they talked tuh amusing bgt, trus hahaha motretin mata =))
Pokoknya ini beda banget sama fic2 yang gw baca (secara merlin ama HP), jadi seger gitu deh, biarpun gw nebak2 tu sapa aja tokohnya xD

Very nicely written ;>b

[halfmoon_smile]

Let me give a hug first to my man, Person, hilariously sarcastic as ever!

Apa ya mas eh mba farf /digelepok, suasana macho nya dunia laki-laki dapet banget, all hail to the careful and pointing description. That challenging "As many as i want, Sergeant," is oh so made my inner heart wants to jump onto him.

I put your brain back to the inside of your head, and force you to write another BradxNate.

[impala_chick]

"As many as I want, Sergeant," he said.
It might be only Nate's imagination, but he could have sworn he saw Colbert's dark pupils dilate even from this distance.
So intense.

You captured so many characters in this snapshot!