Comments | figment_tree: DGM, "His Borrowed Toys"

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DGM, "His Borrowed Toys"

Dec 04, 2008 18:00

It was too hard to fight someone who looked, smiled, like Allen. But Lavi would rather have the fighting than... this.

Warnings: Spoilers about the 14th. Theories about the 14th. Theories about the Heart. Theories about Lavi and Allen. Total name confusion. Sexual harassment and self-destructive behavior. Cough ( Read more... )

allen, !d. gray-man, lavi, :lavi/allen

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sailormac December 5 2008, 01:45:35 UTC

Wow. Your picture of the 14th is great, very believable (especially the concept of a "Noah of love" trying to find fulfillment in life through empty sex), and so is Lavi's emotional struggle. I'd love to see you continue this.

dhampir_72 December 5 2008, 04:20:43 UTC

Wow, just...wow. Completely realistic and beautiful characterization. I loved it!

emudii December 5 2008, 04:38:24 UTC

You just crippled my soul.

I've been playing with a lot of those concepts, separately, but the way you managed to string them all together into a single space... you're effin' amazing.

animegoil December 5 2008, 04:39:41 UTC

Wow, that was amazing. You managed to wrap that scene up without needing to go into plot and such, and man, that packed a punch. Great use of dialogue to highlight contradictions in Lavi's thoughts and the emotions of the 14th <3 You did great with the emotional aspect of this, and you have a good, solid writing style <3

rheoster December 5 2008, 05:04:57 UTC

I LOVE THE ENDING.

When I was half way through the story, I was echoing Lavi's thought: OMG GIVE ALLEN BACK, YOU BASTARD. But in the end, I felt so sorry for the 14th.