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Title: Smoke Gets In Your Eyes (2/3)
Author: Me, nellie_darlin
Disclaimer: Not mine. Jo's.
Pairing/Characters: Lily/Sirius, Lily/James
Rating: NC-17
Length: 4,820 words

Summary: The real reason Lily Evans keeps turning James Potter down? She's already sleeping with his best friend...

Teaser: Lily is naked, Sirius in his boxers (but hopefully not for long),

Comments

[seaislewitch]

Hmmmm... The turning point, I'd say.

Quite enjoyable, and the details truly make it.

Sirius is sexy and adorable. *sigh* I think you've got him just right.

[tourdefierce]

Found you on a rec site, so I hope you don't mind the random comment.
But I usually hate Lily/Sirius but this was wonderful; the mix of just sex and unsure affection is perfect and so very much what many of us get wrapped up in.
I am very excited to see her fall for James though and how it all pans out between her and Sirius. Obviously cheating isn't Lily's style, but I love how she begins this part of the piece thinking how he pales in comparison to Sirius but you can feel her ease into James.
Bravo.
Happy writing.
-Emily

[choccies]

This was an amazing 2nd part to the first bit. I love how you actually get to see her interact with James, and watch her slowly fall in love with him!

Squeee! GENIUS!

[lyras]

“I got you champagne,” he says proudly. “Cooler than butterbeer, eh?”

Such a great line :).

Lots of things I liked here. The conversation between James and Sirius is what first made me sit up and take notice: the characterisation of both of them is really interesting. And I like your take on Lily's parents.