FIC FOR RYOGRANDE

Mar 27, 2013 07:57

For: ryogrande
From: sashjun

Title: Step by Step
Pairings/Characters: Nakamaru/Ueda
Rating:NC-17
Warnings: feelings
Notes: Hi there ♥ I really hope you like this. I also hope there isn’t too much feelings in this for you, but they just wouldn’t go away. 6558 words. Thank you to my cheerleader and to my beta ♥
Summary: Nakamaru likes Ueda. And Kame says Ueda ( Read more... )

rated: nc-17, year: 2013, p: nakamaru/ueda

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chuckles0505 March 30 2013, 01:12:46 UTC
This was all kinds of amazing!
I loved how you wrote all their characters, and hence, this read very believable for me.
Especially Ueda, I can't tell you how much I loved his head in all this.
A particular favorite:
“Did you plan this?” Nakamaru asks, a little too quietly, eyes wide.

“Is it a bad thing if I did?” It better not be. But if it is, Ueda will blame Kame.

“No.”

Ueda wants to high five Nakamaru, because no, it wasn’t a bad thing, but he realizes that’s not too appropriate.
I adore Ueda's over eager dorky side coming out and him wanting to high five over his little victory seems so spot on :DDD
And the blaming Kame part too hahaha

So much love for the maruda interactions ♥♥♥
The teasing, the comfortableness, how they know each other so well ("curious little stalker" Nakamaru really got me xD)
The non-date where they ate ice cream and hung out at a pet store ;A;
Their adorable cheesiness <3333
And the sex, so hot *______*

I really, really loved this a lot. Thanks so much for making it all happen ♥

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sashjun April 14 2013, 18:57:36 UTC
Ah the high five I wasn't sure about it but it kept appearing in my head as Ueda's way of being so hyped up and happy about some success and yeah ....

Anyway, thank you for such a lovely comment. I'm really happy you enjoyed this.

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lwootz March 30 2013, 14:42:48 UTC
Oh, author-san, I cannot tell you the ways in which I loved this. Like I finished reading it quite a while ago and just couldn’t quite find the words for all the dialogue, the premise, and the execution itself that got me. I think this is genuinely one of the best Maruda fics I’ve read. Like I have this ongoing theory that you can rarely go wrong with Maruda, but in this case, it’s perfect not just because of the pairing but your stylistics added a lovely originality to the pairing.

First of all, it’s very rare to see fics where the protagonist is the one being pined for and that really got me because of that fact that he had to be told by a third party (and oh man, Kame in this) and secondly because he’s convinced that he definitely doesn’t feel the same way.

“Okay, then write a song for him.”

I love how it’s such a precise thing Ueda could do for Nakamaru but somehow it really would be most appropriate for Ueda, of all people, to do.

It’s a mystery how Ueda could’ve not noticed. Now that he knows, it’s crushing into him like a ( ... )

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lwootz March 30 2013, 14:43:23 UTC
“Actually, right now I’m kind of strangely glad you know. It’s been so long. I’m used to being flustered around you. It’s a permanent state of alert for me. I feel a bit vindicated that I’m not the only one suffering.”

It’s definitely something in the minimalistic honesty he puts forward about how he just simply really likes Ueda and even in the middle of all this awkward, they’re so comfortable together that Maru can even return the semi-callous jibes.

He looks pretty tired, a bit haggard, his shirt crumpled, hair a bit overgrown for his current style and his face hasn’t been shaven… It kind of suits him. But Ueda knows Nakamaru well enough to guess that he’s probably quite uncomfortable.

*__________* What a great image.

“Ueda Tatsuya, if I’m working my ass off here only to save your gay porn, you are so dead,” he says, and his ears are actually red. LOL this is perfect. And just the prospect of Nakamaru spotting the files and clicking them open in order to know what they are. And how Ueda actually has gay porn and that ( ... )

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lwootz March 30 2013, 14:44:05 UTC
“Nakamaru thinks it’s just physical,” Kame tells Ueda, inspecting the newest addition to Ueda’s manga collection over his huge glasses.

I really like how you transition scenes. Ueda’s mind cuts to Kame speaking it for both Nakamaru and Ueda. Perfect.

Ueda is about to send Kame home.

I love that this sounds like it happens a lot. Kame visits and speaks inconvenient truths and Ueda gets tired of it.

“Look, it doesn’t have to be anything epic.” Ueda knows Kame is lying. That he secretly thinks Nakamaru deserves epic.

AWWWWWWW whaaat awwww ;A;

“You read too much fanfiction. You really should tone it down.” Ueda frowns.

“Well you should know that in fanfiction, you’re usually the sensitive one, not the emotionally stunted one. That is Nishikido’s role.”

I spluttered and everything is suddenly just beautiful in this verse because Kame reads fanfic and oh god, I can’t.

Of course their thighs brush, but unlike in Kame’s fiction, it just makes Nakamaru jump and move away. Ueda still catches him staring at his collarbones or at ( ... )

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lwootz March 30 2013, 14:44:23 UTC
But then ok, like, reading that whole sex scene. At some juncture, my jaw just dropped and I had to take a brief break to recover because just WOW. Everything Nakamaru does, how absolutely explosive it gets at one point. Plus just, the stuff Nakamaru ends up saying and how even when it’s just absolutely obscene, it was completely believable. Plus, he actually ends up riding Ueda.

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I would use more words to describe my utter admiration and the applause this smut deserves but I would only embarrass you and myself lol. But I want you to know it’s been ages since I’ve read a sex scene that steamy and blush-inducing. Fantastic, author-san.

“No one’s buying your prude act now, Yuichi. You’ve just been moaning so filthy I was a little shocked.”

“You liked it,” Nakamaru whispers, stretching to do so right into Ueda’s ear. “Next time, I want to fuck you,” he adds.

*expires permanently; the rest of this comment will be forwarded to you from the bowels of hell*

... )

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ayame_hadouken March 31 2013, 02:42:45 UTC
nothing will compare to all of the things levy and ri said, but gosh anon, i loved this. all of the feels, and all of the porn. just, yes; very yes.

thank you <3<3<3

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sashjun April 14 2013, 19:03:39 UTC
thank you for reading and liking it ♥

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beltenebra March 31 2013, 06:47:45 UTC
This was great! I loved the build-up and the realistic twist at the beginning where no, Ueda really does like girls. But along the way he noticed more and more things about his relationship with Maru. I adored Kame the matchmaker and enjoyed the idea of him hooking up with Ryo-chan at the end.

Thanks for a funny, sweet, sexy (the sex was hooooot - especially after all the waiting!) fic!

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sashjun April 14 2013, 19:11:10 UTC
I love how people seemed to like the random Kame Ryo hook up, but I laughed adding it so it works :D I'm so happy to hear you like this (sex included :D) Yay! And thank you for such a nice comment.

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sashjun April 14 2013, 19:14:30 UTC
Hiiiiiiiii ♥

The mention of Ueda slipping back into his old way made me so happy.

and the quotes ♥ and just everything about this comment. I am so happy you enjoyed the fic. fhjsfgjs ♥ THANK YOU!!!

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