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faye_dartmouth

H50 Fic: The Eleventh Hour 8/13

Feb 17, 2011 08:04

A/N: And now, back to Steve's POV to see how he's handling this change in the game. Thanks :) Previous parts here.

( Sometimes bad things happened. )

fic, the eleventh hour, hawaii five-0

Comments 14

kitmerlot1213 February 17 2011, 15:07:49 UTC

I keep saying this but DAMN!!

I love how worried and concerned Steve is for Danny but he's still in Super SEAL mode, God love him :) And of course Danny's going to be bitingly sarcastic--that's who he is. But in the end, they are partners and they love each other--even if they can't quite say it outloud.

I do like Steve's vow that he's going to get the two of them out of there and I can't wait for Steve to kick Blaine's butt for what he's done to Danny.

faye_dartmouth February 20 2011, 18:52:33 UTC

I sort of love Steve and his super SEAL mode. And I also love Danny's sarcasm, even under duress (especially under duress). Their bond is expressed in distinct ways but I think in the end, they both know it's there so they don't need to spell it out.

And Steve definitely has some butt kicking to do :)

Thanks!

ratherastory February 17 2011, 15:14:46 UTC

I have all sorts of intelligent things to say, really, but right now they're all kind of drowned out by "Daaaannnooooo!" in my head. :(

I'm waiting for you to fix this, you understand. ;)

Love how Steve, in spite of how worried he is, is still evaluating, calculating, figuring things out. Super!SEAL indeed!

faye_dartmouth February 20 2011, 18:52:58 UTC

LOL. I will fix it...eventually....

Thanks :)

alamo_girl80 February 17 2011, 16:00:09 UTC

I'm going on record as saying that this:
"I was trying to envision the synapses in your brain and wondering if they triggered like they do in a normal person or if they skip a few key steps of self-control and miss the transition from thought into action."

...As being the best Danny line ever and I really want to steal it in some form. But I won't. Because you do everything H50 better.

Also, for a guy's "look" to make Steve I-don't-have-a-fear-gene (except when my friends are in danger)McGarrett want to shudder, THAT is scary.

faye_dartmouth February 20 2011, 18:55:08 UTC

You know, for me, it's less like writing Danny's dialogue as it is letting Danny talk in my brain. So it's good to know that it sounds right :)

It is so gratifying to see how far I can take characters and keep them in character.

Thanks!

gunslingaaahhh February 17 2011, 19:08:13 UTC

ahhhhh my bbs! hurry up before danno bleeds to death plz k thanks =(

faye_dartmouth February 20 2011, 18:55:34 UTC

More will be up tomorrow...no promises on how well Danny fares though :)

Thanks!

sgflutegirl February 17 2011, 20:12:12 UTC

Oh no!! Danny stopped talking! This not a good thing at all!!

Can't wait for more.

faye_dartmouth February 20 2011, 18:56:14 UTC

Things are a bit dire, but I'd be lying if I said it wasn't kind of fun :)

(And did I mention that it was a gopher!?)

Thanks!

sgflutegirl February 20 2011, 18:57:32 UTC

It's quite fun to read as well! :-D