Comments | fateful_hour: i just want to make a clean escape

kaiwynn in fateful_hour

i just want to make a clean escape

Aug 19, 2008 18:16

i just want to make a clean escape
deidara/sakura. pg. 217.
Those clenched fists, sweat dripping down a neck pale and glistening, green eyes like signals sent to ward off demons.
for rika, who gave me this random pairing. i actually hate deidara, but i like this fic? idk.

( no obstacle for you )

fic type: drabbles, ? noncanon pairing, pairing type: het, * naruto, & fanfic ;

Comments 8

insomiac_writer August 20 2008, 01:42:30 UTC

asdfadeareafaea!!!

<3!

Noooo~ how could you hate Deidara? lol.

'Because now she'll never grow old

or tired

or loved.

He would try his best to fix it, but his best isn't ever enough.'

My favorite part besides the whole thing.

kaiwynn August 20 2008, 01:52:17 UTC

idkidk! change my mind somehow!

i'm glad you liked it <3!

silhouette_68 August 20 2008, 01:54:34 UTC

Not a DeiSaku fan but this was just sweet! :D

kaiwynn August 20 2008, 01:58:19 UTC

thank you!

dayofcaligula August 20 2008, 04:17:22 UTC

I like the flow of the story and the words that you've used fit perfectly to what you want it to mean. I'm not a shipper fan of any Naruto characters, but this projection is good. Continue writing because you have this certain uniqueness in your style and it soothes the readers in all ways.

kaiwynn August 20 2008, 15:27:21 UTC

thank you very much! this comment means a lot to me. i think i will keep writing for a while, it's just so cathartic.

and i don't actually like this ship, but it was fun to write anyway. :)

gwinna487 August 26 2008, 06:17:18 UTC

This is such a beautiful story. It reads almost like poetry. I've never read this ship before, but this fic makes me kind of understand it - they're both so full of life and passion (at least before Sakura became a puppet), and that's what Deidara values, that brief moment of vitality and exuberance, the explosion. Heh, I think I understand Deidara's character better too (and I've liked him all along). It really felt like I was seeing through his eyes. This is all the more impressive when you don't even like him or the ship. So, great job. I love it.

(If this review makes no sense, it's because I'm writing it in the middle of the night. Sorry.)

kaiwynn August 27 2008, 23:49:20 UTC

oh no, it makes perfect sense! i love this little comment so much, you have no idea. i'm so glad you got something out of this story. ♥