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Wish You Were Here Remix

Jun 11, 2010 07:58

Title: Wish You Were Here Remix
Author: Websurffer
Pairing: Neil/Jon
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: Not mine.
Notes: xthursdaynextx is letting me thief her dialogue for this remix. It starts with her stroy, only from Neil's mom's POV, and then continues on to when she meets Jon for the first time. ETA: Cross posted to Boosh Slash Haven.

( After all, mother knows best. )

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Comments 12

ftw302 June 11 2010, 15:45:37 UTC

Tsk, no grandkids for Neil's mum. I liked this, I wanted a continuation of the fic it was based on XD Great remix of things from the Mum's perspective.

websurffer June 11 2010, 16:54:28 UTC

It's probably for the best. Can you imagine Neil's kids? They'd run rough shod over Jon and lie like pros before they turn five. Glad you liked it ^_^

xthursdaynextx June 11 2010, 16:03:35 UTC

I'll admit, I was a bit dubious when you said you were doing this, but I really like it, it's an interesting point of view, I like how she thinks of Neil as too hard and that Jon softens him :)

(Small point - your third paragraph slips into past tense, sorry for being nitpicky but I always notice these things. It's easy to do.)

websurffer June 11 2010, 16:42:04 UTC

Nit pick away. If I noticed it would drive me nuts too, so I'll go fix that.

I'm so insanely pleased that you like it, you've got no idea. XD

xthursdaynextx June 11 2010, 21:02:20 UTC

Ok, I see you've posted this on BSH... a couple of suggestions, first fix the summary, you have 'stroy' instead of 'story' and 'thief' instead of 'thieve'. Also I think you should specify that it is Fast Fuse/Mint Royale in your notes, and also link to the main story, my story (since you are 'remixing' it after all) and the comm (you mention the comm but don't link to it). Because honestly, even though Fast Fuse was popular on BSH, I don't think a lot of people looking at that summary will know what it is. Hopefully that way you can get more readers and also advertise the comm a little bit!

websurffer June 12 2010, 01:16:28 UTC

*salutes* Yus, mon captain! It has been made as you have said!

the_reverand June 11 2010, 22:28:58 UTC

This was lovely, nice to see it from the other side.

She rather hopes that he isn't sick in the flowers.

Haha, yes. :D

websurffer June 12 2010, 01:08:32 UTC

I'm glad you enjoyed it :D

lifeby_thedrop June 12 2010, 13:18:44 UTC

This was very sweet. I always loved that scene, and it's nice to have Mom's pov.

websurffer June 12 2010, 13:46:10 UTC

I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D

eggnogged June 15 2010, 14:01:55 UTC

Sorry I'm late to this! Just got back home after two weeks away from home.

Aw, this is quite a sweet way to link those two parts of the story! :) I liked that Neil's mother thinks he's too hard sometimes.

websurffer June 15 2010, 14:16:57 UTC

I'm really glad you liked it. Though I was a little weirded out to be writing from the pov of a mom, I do think she'd be worried about how his job is affecting him.