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Apr 14, 2007 21:51



Title: His New Master
Author: Ave Ebony
Beta: wonderful 
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twicet April 16 2007, 23:55:18 UTC
I liked this and would enjoy reading more. Thank you.

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ave_ebony April 17 2007, 19:27:28 UTC
Thank you very much. I am thinking about writing more, but I cannot promise anything (soon).

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foudebassan April 17 2007, 08:00:31 UTC
That's a very promising fic. Will there be more? Thank you for writing.

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ave_ebony April 17 2007, 19:29:21 UTC
Thank you for your kind words. I enjoyed writing it muchly - Severus´ thoughts were a challenge! I might write more, but it will not happen anytime soon (if ever).

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OMG fstoheaven October 18 2007, 17:27:33 UTC
I love this fic, Severus is so frightened, it's almost sweet; in a really twisted way.
And I like the way you made Tom almost better then Lucius. (Almost)
You're one of the few people who can write submissive Snape that I can enjoy.
Go you!! Well done!
Please write more!!

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Re: OMG ave_ebony October 18 2007, 17:49:55 UTC
Thank you very much! I like submissive Severus and I like the suspense and anxiety in fanfics. Unfortunately, majority of slavery or D/s fanfics I have read turned up full of violence and the subtlety of thread and fear was missing. The second reason why I wrote this was Voldemort. He could not have been the raving lunatic during the first war. Had he been, he would have never attracted people like Malfoy. He was dark and ruthless, no doubts, but he had big goals and he was clever enough to reach them (at least partially).
If I may reccomend a fanfic, have a look at "Better Angels" by Imk05 on Fanfiction.net.
I would write more, but I am without a beta reader, currently.

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good read aonian December 23 2007, 23:19:28 UTC
Hey, this is a lovely story.

I like how you take a different view of Voldemort. He's still an evil, sociopathic bastard, but from Snape's perspective he's practically the pick of the litter. This works very well at showing how aweful Snape's life must have been up to this point. You don't need to show us Snape being tortured by the Malfoys, you only need to show us how much better Voldemort is by comparison. Makes your heart ache, it does.

Also, I like how you managed to make a semi h/c fic out of these two characters, without making Voldemort a misunderstood fluff bunny or making Snape so broken that he is boring to read. In fact, I liked this Snape quite a bit, although I usually like a little more bite to my Snape. But I suppose sarcasm, even when kept to ones self is dangerous when living with a evil sociopath who can read minds. Poor Snape!

lmk05

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Re: good read aonian December 23 2007, 23:22:10 UTC
Whoops, hey, I didn't see your rec for me in the comment above (bad reader, commenting without reading other folk's comments first! No cookie!). Thanks!

lmk05

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lol ave_ebony December 24 2007, 21:41:57 UTC
I really loved your fanfic, I simply had to rec it. *hands some home-baked christmas cookies*

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thanks ave_ebony December 24 2007, 21:44:54 UTC
Aww, that is exactly how I wanted to show Voldemort: ruthless but not a raving lunatic; cruel when needed but not uselessly... I believe his personality would change with every horcrux made... (though I am not sure I will be good enough writer to write it properly)

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Excellent helga1967 July 27 2010, 21:50:19 UTC
Thoughful the fear and the pain of the slave. Wonderful presentation of the dark lord distrustful of everyone.

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