Ok I still havn't found a beta yet so be brutal
Title: child of the stars
rating: NC-17 eventually.
Disclaimer: I don't own anything from neither Stardust nor Chuck.
pairing: Chuck/Casey
summery: they're all at Chuck & Ellie's watching old family videos
when the spies in the room notice something...
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P.s.
You can just tell English is not my first language
Word is a grate(sp?) help let me tell you.
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Also, you did spell 'matter' correctly in that comment. 'Grate,' however, should be spelled 'great' in this situation. Good luck!
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I've had a splitting migraine and tooth ache all day and reading this cracked out piece of fic had me snorting and rolling with laughter.
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P.s.
You can just tell English is not my first language
Word is a grate(sp?) help let me tell you.
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I agree with hourglass244, you've got an interesting idea here. But it needs to be fleshed out more and I think there needs to be a reason that Chuck and Ellie are showing the video.
Here's a few questions for you -
Did Morgan never notice these things? He's been Chuck's friend for ages.
If Chuck had any powers why hasn't he used them? Even if it was just to help with Intersect stuff.
If you rework the piece and need a beta just PM me and I'll give you my email address.
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Also, I'm pretty sure it's spelled 'Wienerlicious'.
A bit more fleshing out, please, if you're rewriting. Also it's not always easy to tell who is meant to be speaking. you don't have to start every line...
Chuck said, "
Casey replied, "
Sarah interrupted, "
But something in what they say [or how they say it] will let the reader figure it out.
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