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faizah_from_aus

Story -- Rough First Draft

Sep 05, 2004 21:30

( The beginning of a story. Current title: Holidays )

Comments 5

kvschwartz September 15 2004, 11:14:59 UTC

Does the moon look different at the equator? If so, why?

faizah_from_aus September 15 2004, 19:47:17 UTC

I don't know. I'm closer to the equator, and I had never seen the moon tilted like that before... Seeing it inspired me, I suppose. I'm not really sure what made it look like that, the closest reason I could guess was my location.

editorial comments kvschwartz September 15 2004, 11:26:16 UTC

I don't know how to be polite in my comments. Haven't yet learned that trick. So I'm just going to go through line by line and give comments, and I hope you find some of them helpful. Apologies in advance. Here we go ( ... )

Re: editorial comments faizah_from_aus September 15 2004, 19:54:00 UTC

Thanks. I'll work on that. Look out for my writing journal, faizah_writes, since I'll probably be posting it there. Thanks again! :)

Re: editorial comments faizah_from_aus September 15 2004, 20:19:07 UTC

Here is the story now. :)