That last bit was... awkward to read. I had trouble picturing it properly because there was random stuff going on... Where did the sheet come from? And what about lube and condoms and stuff like that? Sorry for chastising you, but it seemed rather unrealistic... oxymoron that that is however. XD
-Gackt searched the house and found the sheet. -They didn't use condoms or lube ('cept poor man's haha) because neither of them were planning it and because they got caught up in the moment.
I think that answers two questions. I appreciate your critique and I may go back and change it, but seeing as it's up already and it's quite old, I'll probably leave it as it is.
ahaha what a pleasant surprise in the morning XD this whole fiction is filled with humor, very appealing. And a very steamy sex scene...with a cute ending.
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I LOVE that line! This is so cute. I love your work.
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And your icon... it's amazing! XD
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this is awfully cute x.X
*still smiling like mad*
I want more of Gackt X Miyabi XD
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You never know what may happen, though. A car hood may be involved in some way. ::winks::
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-Gackt searched the house and found the sheet.
-They didn't use condoms or lube ('cept poor man's haha) because neither of them were planning it and because they got caught up in the moment.
I think that answers two questions. I appreciate your critique and I may go back and change it, but seeing as it's up already and it's quite old, I'll probably leave it as it is.
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this whole fiction is filled with humor, very appealing. And a very steamy sex scene...with a cute ending.
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