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(DAY 4: #86) THE TIDES

Jul 29, 2015 17:48

Title: The Tides
Pairing: D.O./Suho
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 5080w
Warnings: kind of kidnapping and false imprisonment
Summary: To Suho, living on land felt a lot like being a fish out of water.
Author's Note: I tried to make it all ambiguous, but I'm sure there are mistakes dealing with coastal life and its animals. There aren't many seals in ( Read more... )

round: 1, rating: pg-13

Comments 5

wolfodder July 29 2015, 13:18:47 UTC

This is really good! I got frustrated with Kyungsoo when he took Suho's pelt but he knew that he was wrong to do so and gave it back so I'm glad.

tarofroyo July 29 2015, 19:21:26 UTC

(Sorry I think I accidentally replied to you T-T I suck with handheld technology)

canadaphile August 3 2015, 05:00:33 UTC

I was frustrated while writing Kyungsoo's little crime there. I was honestly upsetting myself with my own plans. I'm glad I wasn't the only one.

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tarofroyo July 29 2015, 19:19:55 UTC

Omg omg omg <3_<3 I was so excited when I saw the prompt got claimed and have been anticipating this story <3 <3 <3 and it went far above my hopes. I love all the descriptions--I've grown up in places by the sea, and the story brought back memories. I like that you used the aquarium seals to mirror suho's situation, and Chanyeol talking to dogs is so cute and him lol. The emotions in this story were written so well. I could feel both Kyungsoo's and suho's conflict and loneliness throughout their relationship and I felt really sad for both of them. I'm glad kyungsoo finally learned the lesson and that when he did, it wasn't some super dramatic confrontation/realization scene, but something he'd already known deep inside and finally accepted though it was hard for him. And I'm happy they still got a chance at a happy ending =') this time without secrets and doubts between them ( ... )

canadaphile August 3 2015, 05:06:47 UTC

Your comment made my day, seriously. I was stressing over writing this, and I kept adding stuff when I was supposed to be finishing it up, so I wasn't sure it was all cohesive. I've also had very little beach experience. I've been to both the Pacific and Atlantic coast once each, twice if we include Staten Island. I'm very pleased that it brought back nice memories for you; I loved it the few times I visited the ocean.

You worded the exact feelings I was hoping to evoke. Loneliness and eventual acceptance. I didn't want a dramatic conclusion, because there was no drama between them. It was easy but unbalanced, with Kyungsoo's mounting guilt. I wanted those good feelings to be there, but it sometimes just is not realistic to continue a relationship. Doesn't mean the feelings go away, which I tried to express with the very end.

I'm so pleased you enjoyed this, seriously. I had fun with it, and I am very glad you liked it as much as you did. ;;w;;

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