9 crimes - Tezuka's view

[exiles_diary]

Title: 9 crimes - Tezuka's view (better suggestions are welcome)
Fandom: Prince of Tennis
Pairing: Tezuka x Fuji
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: smex... and bad english...
Word count: ~2600
Disclaimer: Nothing is mine. Characters belong to... whoever had created them. And the idea of the story belongs solely to demonessryu

A/N: If you haven't read 9 crimes by demonessryu, than

Comments

[tacuma811]

Wow, that was beautiful.
I really liked demonessryu's 9 crimes and it's good to read about Tezuka's part of the story now. He really wants Fuji. If only they would have told each other earlier >__< But it was love! Thank you!

[exiles_diary]

Thank you so much *hug*
I wasn't sure because it's the firs time I made something like that.
But it's good to know, that you liked it.

[tacuma811]

*hugs back*
You did a good job ^__^ Your writing style is a bit different from demonessryu's style, but it's still really good ^__^

[exiles_diary]

^///^ I can't write as good as her. And it's Tezuka so it can't be the same anyway.

I got the idea after I read 9 crimes the first time. I didn't like that it looked like Tezuka was the bad guy.
He is an idiot but he isn't bad ^^**

[mitsu_syusuke]

this is so beautifully written..
i like the mention of sin you wrote here..Tezuka had been watching Fuji, if he had the courage to tell Fuji about his feeling, they won't suffer all these years.. but it's good to know they are drawn to each other in the beginning..

thank you for sharing! ^^

ivy

[exiles_diary]

Thank you for reading XD

I couldn't stand the thought of Tezuka being the bad guy.

They are just perfect for one another ^^**

[lafuego]

This is a good spin-off.

My heart just absolutely, positively broke when I first read Ryu-chama's 9 Crimes. But my daughter put the pieces of my broken heart together again when she wrote the omake.

And now, reading the entire ordeal written from Tezuka's point of view gives the story an entirely new perspective. I think you did really well in voicing the conflict within Tezuka's mind and his confusion and his uncertainty until it's all understandable how he cold just reach that point where he couldn't be bothered to care anymore and just went ahead and reached our for Fuji. Good job!

[exiles_diary]

Thank you very very much for your comment.

I really tried very hard, since I'm very unpracticed in writing english stories. And Ryu's work was just so overly great.

I wasn't so sure if it was a good idea, but I just had to get it off my mind and Ryu encouraged me. I'm a little proud of myself, that I could finish it.

So very much thank you for reading it. I really appreciate it. It makes me happy XD

[elysis]

This was just simply awesome. I'm so happy that you wrote Tezuka's view. It's always excited to see Tezuka's thoughts.

The story flow was just perfect. From Tezuka kept watching Fuji commited his crime one after another, to Tezuka finally been the one who commited the same crime with Fuji in the end. And I like how you use this word to penetrated the whole fic.

Thanks for this wonderful fic! Hope to read more from you soon :).

[exiles_diary]

I try to write more, because it's fun and it make me happy to get so many good reviews.

Thank you very much for reading and comenting.
Hopefully I get something done throughout the year, but I always lack time... there's so much to do. >.<

Again, thank you. It's nice to see, that so many people read what I've done.

[demonessryu]

I finally get a chance to read this and I love it!! <333

I esp. like this line:
He had to be the last crime Syusuke commited.
I think it connects the 'crime' theme and the story from Tezuka's PoV very well.

Now I feel kinda bad for making Tezuka seem like the bad guy in my version. Good thing you clear things up XDD

Good work! Write more, ne!

[exiles_diary]

Thank you so much! *hugs*
It's good that you love it.
I was anxious that you maybe don't like it at all, because I turned things around and now it seems like Fuji was just too pathetic.

Anyway - this was exactly what I thought during reading your story. I always do this when someone writes Fuji's point of view. I always think about how Tezuka feels and would maybe react.

And you need to write more too. Maybe now you don't make Tezuka seem the bad guy anymore, because I don't think I can push things right again ^.~

Thank you again and more will come soon. I promise.