FIC: Before I Sleep, part 2 (Veronica, Logan, Keith, Lucas(OMC)) PG13 (this part) 2/3

[evie_oh]

Title: Before I Sleep, part 2
Author: evie_0
Pairing/Characters: Veronica, Logan, Keith, Lucas(OMC)
Word Count: 3,926
Rating: NC-17
Summary: This is a kind of AU of my story Living Without HerFuture fic: in this version of events, Veronica tells her dad and Wallace that she has cancer a lot earlier, and they manage convince her to tell Logan about

Comments

[havemy_heart]

This is so hard to read because I don't want Veronica to die! I look forward to seeing Logan's reaction to this news. It's going to be hard, because he's so bitter about Veronica keeping Lucas from him, but he still loves her and this will kill him.

I really liked that we see that Veronica not telling Logan about Lucas was obviously a hard decision for her, and that she now realizes it was the wrong one. But at least Logan and Lucas have a chance to get to know each other now. I also hope that Logan and Veronica can make amends before she dies.

[evie_oh]

One of the things I really liked about doing this story again actually was the fact that a few people had a problem in the original story with the idea of Veronica not telling Logan, so I'm glad I got a chance to go back and have her explain herself. And also that Lucas and Logan could meet without the extra burden of her death between them.
I hope Logan's reaction lives up to your expectations, I'm actually getting a little nervous now about posting the last chapter...

[afrocurl]

Oh Evie...you just had to go and bring in some awkward moments between Logan and Lucas and now my heart wants to break for the both of them.

You've got an amazing way of painting a scene and getting at the emotions invested in each scene that it's almost painful to read this (in the best way possible.) I want to cry for Logan, Lucas and Veronica in this, and I usually don't cry while reading fic.

The conversations between Logan and Lucas becoming more normal is a nice touch to establish that even after seventeen years, they can find something to bond over. Of course, throwing in the sickness at the end is just a nice sucker punch to the gut, but I should have expected that from you.

I can't wait to see the last part of this.

[evie_oh]

Ok, so I have to say I think I'm a little bit in love with you after that comment... :)

I'm glad I was able to create the emotions so vividly, I was worried that it wouldn't come across as clearly as I wanted it all to. So thank you for commenting on that.

And I'm happy that the conversations between Lucas and Logan seem realistic too, I was worried that people might have a hard time believing that they could bond at all that quickly. But I think my idea behind it was that in each other they sort of (in the least corny way possible) see something that they've been without, and looking for their whole lives.

Of course, throwing in the sickness at the end is just a nice sucker punch to the gut, but I should have expected that from you.
Is that a compliment... or are you saying I'm completely evil?...

(Last part should be up tomorrow :))

[blush_maven]

Ohno... i'm all teary now.
thanks for the update!

[evie_oh]

Thank you (and I'm sorry for the teary)
Glad you're liking it so far and thanks for commenting :)

[freezing_82]

“Its fine mom,” he whispers in a slightly tear-stained voice, the words cracking as his throat threatens to close, “It’s okay, everything is gonna be okay.” The last part is spoken almost like a half prayer as he holds her tightly, the child becoming the parent.

These lines deliciously reminded me Logan's tentative soothing words after he rescued her in the River Styx. I can't help it.
I don't know if it was intentional, but I found it terribly sweet.

They are silent in the car, the music on the radio providing a very thin distraction. Logan feels the boy’s eyes on him, but whenever he turns to meet his eyes they are swiftly turned away, a faint flush blooming on the younger man’s cheeks

[evie_oh]

Ok, so first of all I totally love you for quoting :D

Secondly, thanks for such a wonderful comment, and I'm so happy that you're enjoying this story so much!

I wasn't really thinking of either of those moments when I wrote this, but now that you've mentioned them I think that's pretty much the expressions and stuff I was picturing in my head too. (I'm glad you like the name too! I had a list when I was trying to decide and that was both mine and mine beta from the original stories favorite... It's weird, I didn't think of it at the time, but it's almost a jumbled mix of their names... if you squint a bit..)

I'm so glad you're addicted! It's awesome :D Thank you so much for enjoying this story, I really appreciate your wonderful comments

[freezing_82]

It was really my pleasure! Besides, quoting just comes naturally to me. Pointing out the parts that I like to comment on detail is just easier for me, and I guess less confusing for you (the authors). :P
I had such a busy day, but I saw that you postet the final part on VMfic and I'm on my way to read it! :) (addicted, remember? LOL)
Probably I'm too tired to leave something resembling a decent feedback, but I'll get back to it as soon as possible.
And thanks again for writing this.

[inthevast]

Awww. *sniff* :(

This is going to wreck me isn't it?

Next chapter.