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[Oneshot] Electric Twist

Feb 06, 2011 04:22

Title: Electric Twist
Pairing(s): Ohmiya
Rating: R
Disclaimer: do not own these boys
Word count: 3000
Summary: Sometimes Nino feels like he doesn't really know Ohno at all.

( Nino tried to cover up how flustered he was by readjusting his shirt and making sure his pants were zipped up )

ohmiya, fic, arashi

Comments 38

nakabibighani February 6 2011, 16:27:59 UTC

wow, this is really good. it was impressive how you built up the tension in the beginning and climaxed with the confession kiss.. i can somehow feel your patience in the way you write. some writers get excited and choose to throw the good cards early. you, on the other hand, wait for the right time to see things through :) truly entertaining! thanks ^_^

eva_lee February 7 2011, 19:55:06 UTC

Thank you so much, this comment really makes me want to work harder to keep improving my writing. I'm glad you liked it and thank you for the positive feedback on my writing style.

xxjosumsxx February 6 2011, 18:56:56 UTC

I liked mysertious!Ohno :D and the dance floor touching was awesome!!! I really loved reading this.

eva_lee February 7 2011, 19:56:11 UTC

Thank you!! I also love mysterious Ohno, you could say I have a fetish for a misbehaving leader. I'm glad you liked it

r_tenou February 6 2011, 19:09:26 UTC

Well isn't this a wonderful surprise to wake up to... at one in the afternoon. :P I'm SO glad you decided to take the plunge and post this!! I see you've already gotten a ton of awesome comments - all of which are totally deserved. I'm so freaking happy, I don't know what else to say. lol

Yatta!!!!!

eva_lee February 7 2011, 19:59:20 UTC

WAH thank so much for all your hard work!! ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥ you are truly the best Beta ever!! I hope you are feeling better today looking forward to reading some college fic~~♥

ayarashi February 6 2011, 19:30:10 UTC

Omg! Ohmiya dancing together! That's my dream XD And you make it real! thanks!!!
Love this soo much (:

eva_lee February 7 2011, 20:00:24 UTC

I'm glad I could make dreams come true! It was also one of my dreams, I love reading about Ohmiya on the dance floor!. Thank you for reading!

rinalin February 6 2011, 22:51:06 UTC

this was HELLA hot. DAMN.

But it was so wonderfully, sweetly emotional as well. Ohno's vulnerability is just... guh. Really fantastic job.

eva_lee February 7 2011, 20:02:10 UTC

Thank you!! I was nervous about the R rates scenes since I'm not very good at writing them yet, and even though he was being so sexy, Ohno was still squishable <3 Thank you very much for reading!