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[euphoria_tlp]

Inspiration: “Share with me the blankets that you’re wrapped in ‘cause it’s cold outside, it’s cold outside. Share with me the secrets that you kept in ‘cause it’s cold inside, it’s cold inside.” - Secondhand Serenade ; Vulnerable & Life of a Slave

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If Shizuru ever had a clearer mind of anything, it was the cold. She

Comments

[winter_solace18]

Screw up the characterization? SCREW UP THE CHARACTERIZATION?! HELL NO! You got the characterization just right! You were able to convey the feelings inside Shizuru, her resentment toward the cold, how bitter she is about her silence and how grateful she is at the same time! Hell! You even got her crying in a really believable way! That's just how she is in my story!

Plus, you got Natsuki spot on. She wants to reach out, but at the same time she wants to keep her distance. Aloof, yet longing. Yet she can't stay that way since she's already so close. I also love how you mentioned Shizuru's positioning when they walked together. X3

Oh my gosh, there are no words! I'm so happy! I'm going to read it over again!

-re-reads-

And I love you for mentioning her bare-footed in the snow! xD I just remembered how she was always bare-footed. No shoes, no pants, just clothes usually cold and far too light to be useful in the winter.

It's ironic, she was born in the winter, yet she holds ill feelings to it. Hell, you were also able to mention

[euphoria_tlp]

Squee I'm so happy you thought I did the characterization right! Knowing you and your pickiness of characterization, that's a big compliment. ^-^

And yes Natsuki is unsure and cold. She wants to reach out badly, but she doesn't really know how. She doesn't know how to relieve Shizuru of her pain. It's sad. :[ So sad. And angsty. <3

xD; Your comment is so long I don't know where to respond. Yes I did intentionally put the description of how they walked together. There is a significance in how Shizuru puts herself at a distance and a lower level. That small distance signifies not only her slavery, but her insecurity where she stands with Natsuki.

Whenever I read the early chapters of your fic, I always got the image of a young, chained, and barefoot Shizuru standing in snow. It's one of my favorite images.

And ah yes. A winter child who loathes the winter and wants to escape it.

xD Yeah a fanfic of your fanfic.

[winter_solace18]

You're right. I really AM picky with characterization. Especially Shizuru's, which at times makes me grumble at the way she's protrayed as a horny, devil in disguise, even if it does suit her at times. But anyway, it's one of the reasons I deliberately made her the slave and not anyone else. And yes you should take it as a compliment. >D Like how I take this as a compliment. x3

[euphoria_tlp]

Agreed at the disgruntling of when people portray Shizuru as a mere horny devil in disguise. Unless it's crack I guess. Crack is practically excusable for everything. ._.; As long as it's good crack.

Yes it is very much the same thing for Shizuru. Those two have similar issues a lot of the time, especially they're inability to trust others easily. :P You don't see the opportunities for angst but I do! :D

Little details make me squee. :]

^^

[georgiapilu]

wow...This is so WoW...

Re: ^^

[euphoria_tlp]

^-^ Wh00t!

[ifuritka]

*_* Ah, it really sounds a lot like your sister's story. So good :)

[euphoria_tlp]

x3 Thank you! I'm glad it didn't mess up my sis's story. xD

[renny_chan]

wow...

its like one of those directors cut/extended version of loas from your sister's story. good job. ^^
lol, from this drabble its like you guys collaborate on the story.

[euphoria_tlp]

:D Lol that's an interesting way of putting it! :o It's a deleted sceeeneeee! */mockdrama*

As much as I'd like to collaborate with her, I'm only her beta. ;]