Comments | etherealflaim: Fic: Twist

etherealflaim

Fic: Twist

Feb 16, 2008 16:55

Title:Twist Author:EtherealFlaim Genre:Het, AU, PWP Fandom:Prison Break Characters:Lincoln/Gretchin(Susan) Summary:Susan really knows how to play the brothers. But who is playing whom? Author's Notes:Fic #4 for the foxriver_fic February Challenge
Pairing: HET: Lincoln/Gretchin (o.0 o.0)
Prompt: #4 - a strand of hair and a promise
( She hated every minute of it... )

fic:au, het:prisonbreak, fic:challenge, fandom:prisonbreak, fic

Comments 11

badboy_fangirl February 17 2008, 05:11:20 UTC

You know, it's really sad that the writers had to do what they did this season to rearrange everything, because I'd like to think that had they had the cooperation of certain actresses, Susan/Gretchen could have been more like how you've depicted her here instead of the crazy bitch.

This is a very interesting alternate universe, and her vulnerability is gorgeous.

etherealflaim February 17 2008, 06:03:27 UTC

Yeah, I agree... Did SWC really want to be off the show for good? I would have thought I would have heard about it if she did, typically it becomes widely known when an actor or actress ditches a major show, whether it be for money reasons or whatever. I guess we can only wait and see ( ... )

badboy_fangirl February 17 2008, 06:18:20 UTC

Did SWC really want to be off the show for good?No. The story that has gone around is that when S2 ended she believed she would be coming back for S3. Then FOX rejected the proposed storyline for S3 and the writers/producers had to go back to the drawing board. They decided to kill Sara off, but it wasn't going to be until much later in the season (probably around episode 13 of a regular 22 episode season). SWC wanted to be paid for the entire season, not just 13 episodes. I can see her point, she believed prior to that that she would get a whole year's worth of paychecks. All the shippers of course just think it was horrible/awful/terrible of the writers. I, since I'm not a shipper (and I've already lived through them killing off Veronica) didn't really care. I mean I loved Sara, but everyone is potentially in danger. (I know I continually bite my nails to the quick over LJ's safety). I wish SWC would have done half a season to give Michael better closure or something at least, not to mention it totally derailed the Linc/Gretchen ( ... )

etherealflaim February 17 2008, 06:46:59 UTC

Oh... I hadn't heard that. It makes sense, but yeah that sucks. Unfortunately, I didn't come into the show early enough to fall in love with Veronica as much as I have with Sara, so the former's death came with a lot less sadness.

And while your odds of getting a boy on boy OTP on network TV is going up every year, I doubt you'll ever get the bro on bro OTP thing on network TV ;-)
Alas, it's sad but true. But that's why we're here!

I thought the sex was nice--and actually sweet and touchingly sexy, considering they've had an established relationship for a while in this fic. And certainly in comparison with what I had Linc do to her yesterday... ;-) I really liked it.
So no deal breaker? Woot! I envisioned this as being the turning-point-sex in Susan's mind, where she finally gets caught up in her own trap... she had tried to use Lincoln for her own purposes and ended up falling for him. Maybe she even planned it that way subconsciously.

Yay for reanalyzing my own fiction after the fact... Thanks again for the comments.
~EF

chanchito_z February 19 2008, 00:58:34 UTC

This was very unexpected! I admit, as much as I love Michael/Sara as a pair, I normally have no interest in reading fic about her pretending to be dead and so forth - so it never occurred to me that Linc/Gretchin would pop up in that context. But it makes perfect sense the way you've written it here to be able to work with this difficult pair! It takes the animosity out of the relationship between L/G. And yet the interesting thing you've done is keep a great deal of the tension between them which is what creates that great spark. So it was very well done. That's one of the things I love about these challenges, even when I make them, I'm constantly surprised!

etherealflaim February 19 2008, 01:20:58 UTC

Thanks for the feedback! This practically wrote itself... I just thought "Well, if I were Lincoln, what's keeping me from sleeping with Gretchen?" The biggest thing was Sara, and the next biggest was her treatment of LJ. So, I took the first out of the equation by releasing her, and minimized the second by having her put LJ in much more hospitable lodgings. Then I asked myself, "Why would Gretchen sleep with Lincoln?" The obvious answer was to get something from him... But, if she were the kind of person who would do the things I mentioned earlier, she's probably got too much heart to do that and not get emotionally attached at all. Bingo, story. =)

I'm glad I could bring you something that you didn't expect! Life wouldn't be worth living if it came without surprises and laughter.
~EF

staci_x2 February 19 2008, 23:09:20 UTC

I really liked this! The idea of Gretchen's mask was perfect, and the mention of Lincoln's strong arms just sealed the deal for me. :) Nice work!

etherealflaim February 20 2008, 02:17:47 UTC

Nice pic ;)

I think you'll find that I can't help myself when it comes to writing Lincoln in anything, lol, that I'll mention his arms, his strength, his protection. Maybe it's because I'm an arms man myself ^_^, but I think that Lincoln's potential as a protector is inescapable, based on his body type, and I think that most of the pairings with him are with people who generally have that need (even if it's subconcious).

Thanks for the comment =D
~EF

staci_x2 February 20 2008, 07:10:07 UTC

Nice pic

lol thanks.

his arms, his strength, his protection

I love all that about Linc too ;)

anonymous February 21 2008, 07:10:56 UTC

I don't have a livejournal, otherwise I wouldn't be leaving an anonymous review. (Because I hate it when people criticize a story while claiming anonymity.)

Hmm. Like everyone and their grandmothers, for the first three episodes of the season I was absolutely positive these two would hook up, mostly because the actors have INSANELY hot chemistry, even when they're hating on each other. In fact, I can even imagine them falling in love. But this fic was just too...fluffy. It was mostly well-written, sure, but I couldn't help but feel that they were both very out of character. Any relationship these two would have, regardless of whether or not Gretchen actually killed Sara, would be incredibly dark.

But it's just my opinion.

etherealflaim February 21 2008, 14:20:35 UTC

You are more than entitled to have your own opinion. Not every story is going to strike a chord with every reader... if they did, then there would be no incentive for writers to step outside their comfort zones and try to expand their readers' horizons (as well as sharpen their own skills). I can't say that this fic struck me as fluff when I wrote it. But it didn't strike me as much of anything as I wrote it, as it just wrote itself... though of course fluff can do that just as much as PWP or plot can. I think I had in my mind an image of a dark fic when I initially thought about the pairing, but (maybe because I haven't written anything dark yet) that's not where the inspiration drove me ( ... )