I'm With the Company

Mar 24, 2010 23:17


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Marshie Sez anonymous March 26 2010, 01:34:52 UTC
That is possibly the cutest picture of any rat, evar. Even the Pixar and Dreamworks kind. It just wins, hands down.

I left a review. But bear in mind that I'm about as opposed to that sort of story as a demographic can be. However, I took a run at it and gave it some comments and criticism.

I was a wee bit brutal, but I'm sure you'd prefer that to a generic "Hey, this was pretty good and I want 2 c moar!" sort of review. I noticed a couple editing mistakes I highlighted and left some comments which you might use or might not, but either way they should give you some food for thought.

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Re: Marshie Sez estel_oliphaunt March 27 2010, 03:00:34 UTC
Dude, I just realized in your review you used the term 'Negro'. Take it away Stephen Colbert: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nq3YnJPk4OI

Anyway, wash the taste of romance out of your mouth with this tantalizing prologue... prologue to dinosaurs!

http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2789640/1/

-LS

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Re: Marshie Sez anonymous March 28 2010, 04:05:40 UTC
I tried using the term African-American around my Jamaican coworkers. To quote my foreman Turbo: "What the fuck? Man, why you gotta call us niggers that, man? Am I from Africa? Do I look like I'm a dirty-ass American?"

I'm not about to drop the n-bomb lightly, even if I've suddenly fained n-word privileges. Negro is a happy medium between stupidly politically correct and stupidly offensive, I feel.

I will read the fantasy story soon, me promise.

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