Echoes of sense 1/9

[eruvandeaini]

Title: Echoes of sense Part 1/9
Author: eruvandeaini (beta'd by the delightful nell_aria - all remaining mistakes completely mine)
Characters: Annie/Mitchell
Rating: T, I s'pose, not very good at judging...
Disclaimer: Not mine, yada yada yada
Summary: Annie and Mitchell find more problems in their mutual attraction than just the obvious undead thing
A/N: A story idea I had

Comments

[gryffinclaw]

This is the steamiest Mitchell/Annie fic I have read! Ooooh we need more of that in the fandom!

Great job! Can't wait to read the next instalment.

[eruvandeaini]

I heartily agree we need more, and I posted this for exactly that reason :) Very pleased you like it.

[luckydicelost]

Oh, this ended too quickly! It was absolutely brilliant- I can't wait for part 2!

[eruvandeaini]

Yes, it was a bit abrupt - I combined a PWP with an actual storyline, and it didn't quite work. But there's more to come :)

[nell_aria]

Wow. This is very good. I mean it's very *hot* too, but the writing, the descriptions of the sensations, and the characters' responses to each other are so beautifully done, so vivid and intense. I really admire your writing style. You should feel pretty damn pleased with this!

On a slightly different note, there are some punctutation errors which are a bit distracting. If you would like a beta, I would happily apply myself to helping you out (I used to be a beta at The Sugar Quill, under name Helen H). Really, it was only the punctuation I would suggest editing though, everything else about this fic was very satisfying!

[eruvandeaini]

Thankyou for saying nice things, and very big thankyou for concrit, I'd love to take up your beta offer - punctuation is my weakness, most surely.

(um, how do I do that, not had a beta before...)

[nell_aria]

Okay, how about I pm you with my email address?
Then you can send me a word copy of this fic. I'll highlight the punctuation that needs changing, and then explain why, then send it back to you. I might be able to do this by the end of today; if not, then definitely by the end of the w/e.

Truthfully, it's only one mistake you're making, but you repeat it throughout your story. It's with the speech punctuation, which is a common area of misunderstanding for many people, so don't worry. :) Hopefully, my explanations will help you clear up your own understanding of speech punctuation and then you will feel more confident with your writing skills, and you won't need a beta again! ;)

[eruvandeaini]

Roffle! I've already done second chapter *cough* rated R, but I shall hang fire on posting because it does need a bit of a polish. I'm glad you liked it :)

[ladylauraglyde]

Oh, wow, that was... wow. More please!