Lost fic: Internecine [Jack/Sawyer, drabble]

[eponine119]

Disclaimer: Lost is not mine.
Summary: Jack/Sawyer drabble. Using for fanfic100 #94, Independence.

Internecine
by eponine119
January 12, 2007

Comments

[gottalovev]

oh! oh! that's so good.

and it's been a while when I've read something about their relationship maybe coming to end. that's so sad. Sawyer must not have been left often in his life, I can only imagine what that would do to him.

♥

[eponine119]

Thank you! You make a good point, about Sawyer not being left very much in his life, beyond the big leaving of his parents. It might hit him really hard.

[eponine119]

Thanks. And yes, they idiots, aren't they? ;) Thanks for reading.

[crowgirl13]

Ouch and grr pretty much sum this up for me too. One expects this kind of relationship gone awry thing for these two - neither of them are particularly good about talking through their feelings. And I'm continually fascinated that it's the *con man* who's cast as the more open of the pair.

*shakes head at them both*

Your sparse prose is perfect - there's a bleakness here, captured well by your word choices. I'm also flailing a bit with parentheses love.

[eponine119]

Thank you. There is something fascinating about Sawyer being the open one, isn't there? And yet it's been there in canon.

I appreciate the feedback on the writing itself, especially that you liked the parenthesis. I was worried they might be a bit pretentious, but I liked them.

[cynthia_arrow]

So hurty, but so well done. Just concrete enough to feel the emotions there, no words wasted.

[eponine119]

Thank you!

[nailsinthenight]

The marks, he let them come to him. (Make them think it's their idea.)

And yet that's never been the case and never will be, with Jack. That's the attraction Sawyer finds in Jack, that Jack will make him step outside of himself, to open up and admit to what he wants. Jack makes Sawyer be honest with himself. Sawyer might not want to know it, but he needs to know it, and that's why Jack is so good for him.

And I just said more in fb than you did in the whole drabble. ;)

[eponine119]

And I just said more in fb than you did in the whole drabble. ;)

Well, I think you kind of said what I was trying to say in the drabble, so that's good, right? It got across what I wanted. And that makes me happy.

[nailsinthenight]

Oh, and you know when I said "said more," I meant word-count-wise, not content-wise, right? Because the thing I love most about your drabbles is that you get across such big ideas with so few words. That's a real talent.

*vows to attempt more drabbles*

[eponine119]

I did know, but it was kind of double entredre-y of you, so I went with it. And thank you for saying that...I tend to think of drabbles as cheating, but then I read ones that say so much or are powerful or in some other way are completely successful that it reminds me they don't *have* to be cheating.

After your story the other day, I have no doubt your drabbling would be successful.