Comments | epicflailer: i wanna be your romeo

epicflailer

i wanna be your romeo

Aug 18, 2009 19:04

here's a follow up to that last one, haha. (less cracky, more something i can actually hand in, unfortunately!)

to recap, the assignment brief: write your own creation myth, imitating the style (the choice of words, syntax and tone) of one of the texts from unit i (150 - 200 words)At first only Good and Evil existed ( Read more... )

ahahahhahaha, i hear hell's a doozy this time of year, anti-you, scribble scrabble, help, i equals retard, superstah: david amazingness archuleta, school shit

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daisiesdaily August 18 2009, 11:46:23 UTC

I like this one even better.

epicflailer August 18 2009, 14:04:35 UTC

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! aww, ty for the boost! <3

starafar August 18 2009, 12:18:12 UTC

I am sort of sad that Lucifer Cowell didn't make the final draft. But yay for finishing homework!

epicflailer August 18 2009, 14:04:52 UTC

SO AM I. i had to cut 100 words. ASIAFODLFKBF I HATE WORD COUNTS.

jehane_writes August 18 2009, 13:05:13 UTC

I am similarly sad that Cowell was blue-pencilled out!

Your David-becomes-Earth sequence was lovely, bb, and I think your class wil enjoy the everyday names for the Trio, (and we'll know what they mean!).

Though, idk, Daniel is kinda a third wheel (yeahright!) in this - not sure if you have enough words to do anything with him tho.

epicflailer August 18 2009, 14:06:15 UTC

he was surprisingly popular! D:

and aww, thank you, bb! i hope this goes over well as an introductory effort, ha.

and i totally agree about daniel, only i wanted to keep in line with the adam and eve idea, which means amber needed a partner, which--idk, since i had to take out the last part (TO FIT THE WORDCOUNT, GRR) i guess has now lost significance. sigh, editing.

THANK YOU FOR THE FB, MY DEAR. you are a godsend! ♥

jehane_writes August 18 2009, 15:28:23 UTC

I did get the Adam+Eve thing, hon, and thought the image of Amber reaching her arms out to Evil was particularly pretty.

Woe, that you had to cut the original sin part!

Hey, how about: reverse the order of intros? Make "you, Daniel, and you, Amber", and +then+ David? To make a stronger Adam, Eve and (earth-)child trio reference? (Also, still Archucest - bleurgh.)

Know you'll blow them away at class, hon! +hearts+

epicflailer August 19 2009, 10:36:25 UTC

<333333 ty, bb! and for all your awesome feedback, which sadly did not come into play since i walked into class today and realized this assignment is FOR THE MONDAY GROUP, AND I AM IN THE WEDNESDAY GROUP. my heart just about broke. i am now considering dropping this class because i'm not entirely ecstatic about the way it's being taught (too much poetry, which i cannot for the life of me write or understand, sigh), so. D:

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rajkumari905 August 18 2009, 15:04:48 UTC

IIIIIIIIIII like this a lot. Only Daniel is just kind of there, lol. BUT YAY!

epicflailer August 19 2009, 10:36:56 UTC

LMFAO, MAYBE DAVID AND HIM NEED TO HAVE AN AFFAIR TO SPICE THINGS UP.

snackbreak August 18 2009, 15:32:53 UTC

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epicflailer August 19 2009, 10:37:10 UTC

MY ONLY (COHERENT) RESPONSE--

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epicflailer August 19 2009, 10:37:37 UTC

SORRY FORGOT THE ICON.