Title: Dinnertime Word Count: 525 Warnings: The topic was thought of while watching MTV and singing The Beatles. Warning enough? I think so. Notes: This was written for the June contest atbrigits_flame; the topic is "Oil and Vinegar."
I liked it! Especially the last line. And the paragraph describing the dressing mixing and the stain. And this comment font is so small that I can barely read what I'm typing. :v
xD Yeah... It was one of those "coming out" things... And it was late at night! Yes. Blame the sleeplessness!
:D Yayyyy I'm glad you did. Haha yey metaphor. Didja notice, the oil is the family and the vinegar the protagonist? I started it that way, but thought that saying it outright would make it feel too much like I was holding your hand. =X
I know! I wish I could change it, but it's an LJ premade layout, and I don't think you can mess with those...
...YES, I DID NOTICE THAT. :DDD The whole oil=family, vinegar=protagonist, I was mainly complimenting that when I mentioned "describing mixing the dressing and the stain", because while your adjectives and transitive verbs were lovely, I picked up on the symbolism/metaphor. You introduced it just enough to make the reader aware it was there, but they had to work and deciding what was what--so I'm glad you didn't say it outright, that would've sounded stupid. xP
And I'm getting used to it, so don't sweat it. I was just REEEAAALLLYYY tired when I first commented, because that was one of the days I'd stayed up and hadn't gotten a wink of sleep. D:
! I THOUGHT YOU READING IT LAST NIGHT AT MY HOUSE WAS YOU REPLYING! xD
:D I'm glad you did! I was way too excited about that haha. Yeah, I know... I have a bad tendency to want to hold readers' hands, but I'm getting better!
Awww. Yeah, I don't think it's THAT bad, but I guess I'm kind of used to reading funkay font.
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I liked it! Especially the last line. And the paragraph describing the dressing mixing and the stain. And this comment font is so small that I can barely read what I'm typing. :v
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:D Yayyyy I'm glad you did. Haha yey metaphor. Didja notice, the oil is the family and the vinegar the protagonist? I started it that way, but thought that saying it outright would make it feel too much like I was holding your hand. =X
I know! I wish I could change it, but it's an LJ premade layout, and I don't think you can mess with those...
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...YES, I DID NOTICE THAT. :DDD The whole oil=family, vinegar=protagonist, I was mainly complimenting that when I mentioned "describing mixing the dressing and the stain", because while your adjectives and transitive verbs were lovely, I picked up on the symbolism/metaphor. You introduced it just enough to make the reader aware it was there, but they had to work and deciding what was what--so I'm glad you didn't say it outright, that would've sounded stupid. xP
And I'm getting used to it, so don't sweat it. I was just REEEAAALLLYYY tired when I first commented, because that was one of the days I'd stayed up and hadn't gotten a wink of sleep. D:
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:D I'm glad you did! I was way too excited about that haha. Yeah, I know... I have a bad tendency to want to hold readers' hands, but I'm getting better!
Awww. Yeah, I don't think it's THAT bad, but I guess I'm kind of used to reading funkay font.
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