Comments | ephemeralbreath: brigits_flame: Once Upon a Time

ephemeralbreath

brigits_flame: Once Upon a Time

Jun 07, 2009 01:47

Title: Once Upon a Time
Word Count: 1,016
Notes: This was written for the June contest at brigits_flame ; the topic is "Ranch."

( Once Upon a Time )

fiction: original, brigits_flame

Comments 17

cedarwolfsinger June 7 2009, 22:44:15 UTC

Hmm. Interesting take on the prompt. Stories never end, indeed.

ephemeralbreath June 7 2009, 23:53:37 UTC

Yeah... It didn't start out this way, but I did base it off the prompt, really!

Thank you for reading.

cedarwolfsinger June 8 2009, 00:11:46 UTC

You are most kindly welcome. I do my best to read all the entries. I like to see what people are doing with the prompt -- especially one like this. By the way -- are you new here? I don't recognize your screen name. If so -- welcome to the Flame. I hope you like it here!

ephemeralbreath June 8 2009, 00:28:04 UTC

:D Thank you! I've actually participated before, but under a different name. It was way back when the community first started, though.

amused4ever June 8 2009, 03:22:07 UTC

For some reason when I finished reading this, my first thought was, "OH KELLY YES THIS IS YOU." 8D A good thing, I promise. I love it when people go in an entirely different direction than expected with a prompt. And I don't know if I'm reading too much into things, but I think I definitely see some symbolism here? Was the story supposed to be a kind of extended metaphor? Because I was kind of drawing from that, especially in following with the prompt.

I especially like the end, because oh that is so true. xD

ephemeralbreath June 8 2009, 03:34:51 UTC

Awww, your comment made me smileeee! :D :D

It's definitely a metaphor, and I'm glad you saw that... Can't get anything past you... ;P I was hoping people wouldn't be like OMG DIDNA FOLL0W PROMPTZ!1! ... Not that any Flamers would do that. Haha. Flamers. Hah. Hah. Yeaaah.

Hearts!

libra_dragon June 9 2009, 01:45:50 UTC

I really enjoyed reading this...nice flow and painted a picture in my mind as I read it.

ephemeralbreath June 9 2009, 01:58:02 UTC

Thank you for reading; I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

13_stories June 9 2009, 12:22:00 UTC

Nicely done. Although at first glance I couldn't see the prompt as an inspiration for this story, by the time I got to the end, it was clearly lurking there. Of course, my own didn't obviously follow the prompt either.

You have a gift for setting mood. I like your story a lot.

ephemeralbreath June 9 2009, 18:59:35 UTC

I'm glad you got it! I was afraid it wasn't going to make any sense.

:) Thank you. I'm happy that you enjoyed it.

merthin June 9 2009, 14:23:11 UTC

You're drawing on some very primal archetypes with all of your characters. The piece was well constructed and the images sharp and bold. I especially enjoyed, "Their great wing-like sleeves are menacing...." This is such a vivid image. Keep up the excellent work. :-)

ephemeralbreath June 9 2009, 19:01:37 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it... I really like studying Medieval legends and that type of thing.

P.S. Your icon is awesome.

merthin June 9 2009, 19:50:50 UTC

Ah yes, Siegfried from the original Soul Caliber game, the fallen knight redeemed. (And speaking of archetypes... ;-)