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[Orig '12] Wish 01/?

Jul 04, 2012 11:55

So. I've been threatening to post original work for months now, and it has finally come to pass again. I started writing Wish for NaNoWriMo 2004 and been working (and reworking) on it ever since. At the moment it hustles in 60,000 words or thereabouts, and is only half complete (obviously I didn't make NaNo Goal >_<). Tried posting this in '06, ( Read more... )

original: wish; '12 draft, original: all

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bgreenwivy July 4 2012, 23:20:35 UTC

Let's see where to begin. Okay now overall I adored this chapter. I must make a small request though. Can you please include maybe a short set up of what the different titles mean. Like Emma...is mother I think but is Onban lord or husband? It would help greatly. Also the map isn't very clear...at least to me but I think I can figure out most of it.

The descriptions and the set up were nice. The flow was eloquent and the story Emma told was fluent and gave that feeling that it would be important somewhere along the way. What happened to Micah' mother? I am interested in knowing did she leave or...Well better not think that. What is the history between her and the lady of the house so to speak.

This was definitely intriguing if nothing else and I look forward to the next bit.

entitys July 5 2012, 05:38:49 UTC

Awesome. glad you think it interesting enough to continue. The next chapter should answer a lot of your questions (and probably give you new ones ^_^). Your request for explanation of terms and ideas has been answered here. I think I covered enough of everything needed to know for right now, but if I missed something important for clarity just let me know. Thank you so much for the comment!