Red River Love Song Chapter 4

[englishblue]

I'm shocked to realize I have a new chapter to post today. Sometimes the dam just bursts all of a sudden and what was a small trickle becomes a deluge. Or. Hmmm. A new part. Whatever. With all the lovely Big Banging around, I hesitate to push it out into the stream, all new and scared. But there is a month left to go of BB, and I can't wait a month

Comments

[angels3]

Yeah I don't think it's going to be that easy to keep them a secret.

Can't wait for more.

[englishblue]

Maybe you'll be surprised when you find out about Dean's past. :) Just saying. It might be different than you think.

[macbyrne]

Just one thing; you switch from Sam to Jared, here: “I’m not watching an invalid get his neck stretched,” Jared reiterated darkly, turning away from the sight of a hard torso draped in wet cloth,

Otherwise, fantastic update; the tension between them, JESUS. GUH.

[englishblue]

OMG. Thank you for catching that. I have to watch so close. I usually write J2 and they keep sneaking back in if I don't pay attention.

Yippee for you liking the update!

[earthquakedream]

I absolutely love the way you right this, keeping the language rough not just in the dialogue, but in the narration too. It really fits. I can see everything so damn clearly in the way you right...though I suppose my daddy being a big fan of Westerns doesn't hurt. ;) Keep up the great work, hon!

[englishblue]

Wow! Thank you, lovely. I'm trying to keep the narrative in line with the dialogue, an old fashioned western feel to it.

It makes me very happy to know it's working for you. Lots of big hugs!

[candygramme]

Wow! I'm so in love with your phrasing. I say that every time, but it's always true! Always. I loved your 'shamed rage moved like a coil of smoke' in Sam's eyes, and your 'Arkansas toothpick' and Dean's relationship with Belle, and just everything.

I expect that we'll start to learn some of Dean's secret past, and hopefully Sam will stop being so antagonistic, because the UST is thick enough to cut with that very Arkansas toothpick of yours.

Love it. Keep writing. Want more... and more.

[englishblue]

Praise from you makes me want to dance and sing. There will be more about Dean's past down the line. In fact, he'll revisit it...sort of, wanting to save Sam.

It's wonderful the "phrasing" is working for you. I'm trying to keep that old time western feel to it and it's really fun. I like this story. I'm hoping I'll get a few more comments next time. :D

[mangacat201]

YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAYYy... oh that was mighty great!!! I love them, love them love them... how Sam cares for Dean even if he pretends not to care and how Dean's musings go around in circles missing the OBVIOUS!!
Cat

[englishblue]

Yup! The boys are kind of oblivious, but that's to change soon. They really do care and are all about saving each other. In fact, Dean is going to go to extremes.

Thank you, sweetie for the lovely comment.

[mangacat201]

NOOOoooo.. don't tell me... Sam is going to stick his mighty saquatch foot into a viper, isn't he? That'd be just it. *shakes head* Of course you get lovely comments, I get lovely comments from you *g*
Cat

[englishblue]

Hee. No viper. But that would certainly be interesting.