LJ Idol Season 11: Week 27 - "Values are like fingerprints."

[encrefloue]

Progress

The gales were clamorous throes of derision

threshing across our split and deceitful knuckles,

splaying the remnants of a rook’s contumely

upon our eardrums.

Our vision blotted,

dense and ruddy with the ire of a renounced ancestor.

Comments

[marlawentmad]

I admire the way you densely pack your meaning into folded over vocabulary and hard hitting phrasing.

[encrefloue]

I truly appreciate it-thank you!

[karmasoup]

Progress is so rarely peaceful.

[encrefloue]

Certainly not-especially when the objective is progress no matter the cost.

[d0gs]

Really enjoyed this, especially that last line :D

[encrefloue]

Thank you so much! Pleased that it spoke to you :)

[flipflop_diva]

I had to read this quite a few times. There's a lot being said in such few words. Very well done!

[encrefloue]

Thank you so much for the repeated reading-I had hoped the readers would be drawn to do so!

[halfshellvenus]

threshing across our split and deceitful knuckles,
There is so much implied in just this line, and it all rests on the unexpected use of 'deceitful.'

This speaks to me of a battle hard fought against a legacy that needs to be outgrown. The blotted vision at the end seems like physical vision--the result of an attempt to blind people with the 'heritage' of prior wrongs against the truth. But they can choose to wipe their eyes clean, and I believe they will.