Possibilities - Part Five

Nov 26, 2007 20:43

The next part of this story. Enjoy!

Possibilities - Part Five )

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cozy_cupcake November 27 2007, 02:06:35 UTC
This chapter made me feel sad, but in a good way because your writing is fantastic. Very emotional. Love how Wilson was there for House, and they dealt with it maturely.

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jovsg November 27 2007, 02:08:22 UTC
You! Youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu were first!

*pokes*

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cozy_cupcake November 27 2007, 02:11:37 UTC
Mwuahahaha! Gotta be quick! lol

;)

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jovsg November 27 2007, 02:09:06 UTC
First!

Oh, I loved this section. It surprised me a LOT, because I pictured it so much darker and more angsty, and that's precisely what I love about this fic--it goes there but it doesn't GO there.

So basically I love everyone here. Wilson, the BFF that beats all BFFs poor Allison who had to deal with hell and thinking she'd lose her husband too. And House. Oh, my House.... he's grown so much over the years. I love that he didn't have to betray his gruffness to convey to Allison what she means to him and that he felt the loss too. I loved this line:

“I’d already lined up some necessary accessories for the rugrat,” you say, and you think about how both of you had been keeping your excitement tamped down and how it hadn’t save either of you any grief.

Gah! That just broke me in two.

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enchanted_april November 27 2007, 02:31:09 UTC
Thank you, as always :)

Yeah, I could have gone a lot darker, and even considered it, but it just didn't feel right to me. Maybe it's due to my own fertility issues, but I don't think they would have gone as far as attacking one another. I think they (particularly Allison) would have stopped before that, knowing that their best supporters were each other and mindful of not ruining that.

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jovsg November 27 2007, 03:48:10 UTC
Maybe it's due to my own fertility issues, but I don't think they would have gone as far as attacking one another.

And I think this realism really comes through in your writing. Only a person who has gone through these tough issues can really lend a voice of experience to make it truly three-dimensional. I'm not criticizing other fics, but in matters that are more emotionally involved, being able to give them a voice is really important. And you've done so beautifully.

Perhaps at some point, we can all celebrate a little enchanted_may!

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athousandsmiles November 27 2007, 02:10:52 UTC
So perfectly realistic and true. I'm looking forward to more.

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sharp2799 November 27 2007, 02:38:50 UTC
Definitely hitting the right notes!

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greenescrubs November 27 2007, 04:23:50 UTC
A tumbler and the dusty bottle of scotch from under the kitchen counter become close acquaintances again

It's beautiful to see how House has matured since being with Cameron, and whether he wants to admit it or not, she has changed him, at least a little, for the better.

“Could you shut up while I’m baring my soul here?”

I love this line, as House provides a little comic relief to their situation but can still maintain some gruffness while he bares his soul.

You don’t realize how much you want something until it’s gone. Now I know why you didn’t want to try in the first place.” It’s the best you can do to tell her that you’re in pain too.

So glad that House (and cameron) finally released some of their feelings. This is exactly the way I would imagine House sharing his feelings and pain.

“I’d already lined up some necessary accessories for the rugrat,” you say, and you think about how both of you had been keeping your excitement tamped down and how it hadn’t save either of you any grief.Best part of the whole chapter. Him ( ... )

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