Okay, what the heck... the first paragraph was good nonstruck -_-;;
“My favourite colour is pink,” continued Jonna. Dave tried to figure out how long they’d been there. He was inclined towards the twenty-four hour range, but time seemed so nonexistent it was hard to be sure. It could have been multiple days. Time seemed to stretch on forever. Long since having exhausted any interest in analysing the various attributes of the island, Dave contemplated them without moving. <---HEH HEH, had this experience...
The three palm trees were lacking even the amusement of coconuts <--NOOO! MY AMUSEMENT! COME BACK TO ME COCONUTS!!!!
“Of all the people to be stuck on a desert island with,” /Dave thought to himself. / <--kay your prof is psycho in prefering a RANDOM QUOTE FROM NOWHERE to the possibility of a character THINKING :P
when [S]uddenly struck by lightning. <---HAHAHHAHAA BEST EDIT EVER OMG ::falls over::Sheesh, if I knew we got points for fragments....
Idly entertaining the idea that he was here as a result <---
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passive voice rawksemosnailApril 22 2003, 22:41:52 UTC
Yea her edits are basically really bogus. Have you seen her recommendations to the interrogation story yet? I think they're the most irrational of all. I am going to lead the passive voice and awkward construction revolution!!
I swear I think so many aspiring writers and such completely lose track of the purpose of writing, buried under these rules. And I mean it has happened before; for over a hundred years plays and stories strictly followed the wisdom that they should have no set place and time, such that we end up with stories with the disconcertion of places being referred to as G---a and dates of 18--.. which I found really irritating. I mean as if Jane Eyre wasn't ALREADY painful enough you know
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Re: passive voice rawkszszeldaszApril 24 2003, 05:54:58 UTC
Nuuu I didn't see those...bwaha I must...
YAH PASSIVE VOICE! ::holds up protest signs::
heh thankfully I haven't had to read Jane Eyre, but I do get the point...and it's sad -_-; Writing is supposed to encorporate some originality or something...I dono...maybe writing is turning into math classes >.> well, not turning into...it's been trying to be there for a while.
ARGH not the QUOTE THING.... that can be all right sometimes but....rarr... a description of the scene or whatnot can be JUST as gripping anyhow :P
mmm classmates::CHOMPDEVOUR::
Yes, being a writer shouldn't be about TRYING to Be a Writer -_-; That just...defeats the purpose :P
Bah, who needs the rules. Emily Dickenson wrote with random punctuation so we can the breakage of rules too~
Well..not much left for you to hate...seeing as I just ate them...which, is actually a lot like hate just without the h so maybe you were able to eat some too and be pleased?
Re: passive voice rawksemosnailApril 25 2003, 14:10:48 UTC
Not only does my current exploit, "The Story of Boot," have within it all these strikes at conventional writing preconceptions, and start with the beautiful sentence "Upon once a time," but it occured to me that the entire thing defies the definition of "short story," which the teacher has alleged be definition described "a single event or epiphany."
And while this story WILL be short.. hopefully (= ..it will describe an extended adventure of Boot and his cohorts. I just hope I don't end up totally overshooting the 15 page range we've been instructed to be wary of. But in general I'm already evilticulating like an evil overlord brooding over his emminant glory. muahahahahahaha
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she was talking about her mom making cheese sandwiches, <--well now THAT'S exciting... couldn't it be something like, heh, cheese danishes? XD
bwahha.
I think this is the story I still needa read >.> ::has bookmark..I think?::
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“My favourite colour is pink,” continued Jonna. Dave tried to figure out how long they’d been there. He was inclined towards the twenty-four hour range, but time seemed so nonexistent it was hard to be sure. It could have been multiple days. Time seemed to stretch on forever. Long since having exhausted any interest in analysing the various attributes of the island, Dave contemplated them without moving. <---HEH HEH, had this experience...
The three palm trees were lacking even the amusement of coconuts <--NOOO! MY AMUSEMENT! COME BACK TO ME COCONUTS!!!!
“Of all the people to be stuck on a desert island with,” /Dave thought to himself. / <--kay your prof is psycho in prefering a RANDOM QUOTE FROM NOWHERE to the possibility of a character THINKING :P
when [S]uddenly struck by lightning. <---HAHAHHAHAA BEST EDIT EVER OMG ::falls over::Sheesh, if I knew we got points for fragments....
Idly entertaining the idea that he was here as a result <--- ( ... )
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I swear I think so many aspiring writers and such completely lose track of the purpose of writing, buried under these rules. And I mean it has happened before; for over a hundred years plays and stories strictly followed the wisdom that they should have no set place and time, such that we end up with stories with the disconcertion of places being referred to as G---a and dates of 18--.. which I found really irritating. I mean as if Jane Eyre wasn't ALREADY painful enough you know ( ... )
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YAH PASSIVE VOICE! ::holds up protest signs::
heh thankfully I haven't had to read Jane Eyre, but I do get the point...and it's sad -_-; Writing is supposed to encorporate some originality or something...I dono...maybe writing is turning into math classes >.> well, not turning into...it's been trying to be there for a while.
ARGH not the QUOTE THING.... that can be all right sometimes but....rarr... a description of the scene or whatnot can be JUST as gripping anyhow :P
mmm classmates::CHOMPDEVOUR::
Yes, being a writer shouldn't be about TRYING to Be a Writer -_-; That just...defeats the purpose :P
Bah, who needs the rules. Emily Dickenson wrote with random punctuation so we can the breakage of rules too~
Well..not much left for you to hate...seeing as I just ate them...which, is actually a lot like hate just without the h so maybe you were able to eat some too and be pleased?
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And while this story WILL be short.. hopefully (= ..it will describe an extended adventure of Boot and his cohorts. I just hope I don't end up totally overshooting the 15 page range we've been instructed to be wary of. But in general I'm already evilticulating like an evil overlord brooding over his emminant glory. muahahahahahaha
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