Clay and Puppets - Chapter 1

[emerald707]

As I'm going through and rewriting this old story, I thought it would be nice to post it here on my much unused livejournal, just to do something different. Its also available on FF.Net, if that's more your flavour of tea. I sincerely hope you enjoy it.

Comments

[nte777]

I liked this chapter, because it drops you right into the action. It starts off quite nicely, and it grabbed my attention.

Such incidents occur at times like these, when the simplest of incidents can set off a string of events that would inevitably lead to a future that one Akasuna no Sasori had never envisioned for himself, and one little mistake would set not only his own life, but the lives of countless others, on an entirely different course.

I love the sense of foreboding this sentence bares. It makes you wonder what could possibly happen.

I like the changes, it gives the chapter more depth. I actually like this carefree side of Deidara, though I can't really explain why.

I guess that pretty much sums up my thoughts of this chapter. I'm off to the next chapter.

Can't wait for more!

[hokeypokey10]

This shows a LOT of promise. Keep up the great work and updates!

Great stuff

[black_of_crown]

Wow, this is such a good story. It's probably the best naruto related story I've ever read. I can't wait to read future chapters from you!