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archaeologist_d June 23 2009, 12:06:29 UTC
You write very well and the descriptions were lovely. I really liked how Morgana could see the past and the future so easily.

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emei June 23 2009, 13:31:11 UTC
Thank you! I'm happy you liked how easily Morgana sees the past and the future - I wanted her to master her talents in some way, and at the same time they're constantly threatening to overwhelm her. She sees almost too easily.

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emei June 24 2009, 11:30:20 UTC
Thank you for this thoughtful comment! I'm really pleased that it makes you like the pairing. Hunith really does offer Morgana an escape here, which is what makes it work for me. They both have something to offer the other. Happy you liked it!

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yue_ix June 24 2009, 02:30:56 UTC
Gorgeous take on the prompt; I love how everything is ever changing, how liquid time is to Morgana and how she feels like a lost little girl when she's remembering the past, so used to the future. For the same reason, I enjoyed the occasional unexpected breaks in time, how the scene would just change without warning. The part where Morgana consciously works her magic to close the village from any exterior events that could change it, freezing it as is, and works manually in its daily life is a very smooth wink at some Arthurian legends and a very nice display of her character - the power, protectiveness and longing at once.

The last paragraph in particular is full of lovely imagery - "She sees the past and future twirl across Hunith’s face", "flecks of gold in Hunith’s eyes" and, of course, the two last sentences. I didn't expect to enjoy this as much as I have but am smitten; it is beautiful.

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emei June 24 2009, 11:36:48 UTC
I'm so very pleased by what you say here, thankyou. You've picked up on a lot of things I wanted to get at, like - how liquid time is to Morgana is a great way of phrasing it. Almost everything's fluid, for her.

Thank you so much.

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zelda_zee June 24 2009, 07:53:54 UTC
This is wonderful! Reading it felt like a discovery.

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emei June 24 2009, 11:37:20 UTC
Oh, that makes me very happy. Thank you!

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significantowl June 24 2009, 20:06:17 UTC
oooooh. That's so pretty, and so Morgana.

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emei June 24 2009, 20:44:01 UTC
Thank you! I'm happy you think it's true to Morgana.

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