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elspethdixon

Fic (Marvel, LD:TOY, & Egyptology!

Nov 11, 2008 18:39

Three ficlets in chronological order, for comics, orig fic, and a Canadian television show (three versions of something like Remembrance Day, for Lonesome Dove: The Outlaw Years, Egyptology!, and Marvel). An experiment in present tense, so tell me if anything sounds too clunky.

( Lonesome Dove: The Outlaw Years )

comics, fic

Comments 13

kijikun November 11 2008, 23:47:49 UTC

Steve leaving his gloves on Monroe's grave made me tear up a bit. Poor guy.

elspethdixon November 13 2008, 00:07:22 UTC

Jack Monroe doesn't get enough love (and it's especially unfair that Brubaker killed him off but let his abusive ex-boyfriend - also known s Brainwashed!Fake!Cap - live).

tavella November 12 2008, 00:31:55 UTC

Oh, I love the image of Steve staring at his *second* headstone. And listening to someone who *isn't* going to be coming back from the dead, being buried.

Also, I like the version of the gravesite better in your version -- I really disliked the giant flagwaving statue they gave him in 616, because Steve would have totally wanted to rejoin his fellow soldiers at last, a simple gravestone row on row.

elspethdixon November 13 2008, 00:11:57 UTC

Steve would have totally wanted to rejoin his fellow soldiers at last, a simple gravestone row on row.

He would -- Steve is never really comfortable with how much people look up to him. He thinks of himself as just another guy, and I think a plain headstone like everyone else's might actually mean more to him than a statue.

I really disliked the giant flagwaving statue they gave him in 616,

At the moment, I'm hard-pressed to think of anything Captain America-related in 616 that I don't dislike, including things I liked a year ago, but that's just me being bitter because they still haven't brought him back yet and I ran out of patience for good around May.

Oh all the last story is so dark hohaiyee November 12 2008, 00:58:11 UTC

All those people who don't get a second chance, I was reading CBC this morning, and the count in Afghanistan is approaching a hundred. I didn't realise there's been so much.

Re: Oh all the last story is so dark elspethdixon November 13 2008, 00:17:08 UTC

Thanks for the review!

All those people who don't get a second chance, I was reading CBC this morning, and the count in Afghanistan is approaching a hundred. I didn't realise there's been so much.

I actually wasn't intending it to be dark, just sad, so I guess it shows how things can turn out deeper than you expect/intend them too ^_^. A lot of the detail on the cemetery is based on my visit there for a family funeral last January, and it really stuck me how many of the headstones there were for people young enough to be in college (and not just recent ones -- graves all the way back to the Civil War as well). You really can hear a funeral going on somewhere in the background almost all the time, and not just for burials of people killed overseas - anyone who has served active duty in the armed forces can be buried at Arlington, and they have something like two dozen funerals a day.

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elspethdixon November 13 2008, 00:13:08 UTC

Thanks so much! The odd thing is, while I often do picture comic panel-style visuals in my head while I write, this is one time I didn't.

simmysim November 12 2008, 22:29:29 UTC

I honestly started tearing up. Good jeez, that was very touching. The visuals here are very powerful, and I could practically hear the rifle salute.

(I read that second one as Reed Richards for about three paragraphs before figuring out I was confused)

elspethdixon November 13 2008, 00:19:56 UTC

I totally didn't mean to make you cry! (though I guess I ought to take it as a compliment). The visuals are probably powerful because I've actually been there a couple of times, so I was doing them from memory. Arlington Cemetery actually used to scare me a little when I was a little kid and we'd drive into DC for something. You can see it from the interstate at one point when you drive into the city through Alexandria, and all of the headstones seemed really creepy to me then, because there were so many of them and they all looked the same.

...and I've just realized that I'm an idiot and Steve's guide wouldn't have been a Marine -- he'd be a soldier from the Army'd 3rd Infantry. Marines only act as honor guards for Marine Corps funerals. But the last time I was there was for a Marine funeral, and... I'm dumb. *goes back and fixes*

edited to add:
(I read that second one as Reed Richards for about three paragraphs before figuring out I was confused)*laughs* I probably should have anticipated that and used his full name in ( ... )