I have no idea why those last three lines are broken up poetry-like like that, either.
I like those lines quite a lot, actually; in fact, that whole section may be my favorite part of the story, because it shows how much the timeline is in flux. I think that's why those last three lines work well -- for me they reflect the way the timestream is skipping around. And that's exactly what you meant to do, right? RIGHT?
It is like losing track of which cock goes where only with grammar instead of body parts.
I may need a t-shirt with this written on it, just so you know.
Not sure I like the "Three flips back:"
You'd be wrong about that. It works perfectly.
I think I like that section.
The "I tried/I'm trying/I'll try" section is probably my second-favorite bit, again because it is all about the undetermined timeline. Maybe I am just weak for stories that fuck with timelines, I dunno.
And that's exactly what you meant to do, right? RIGHT?
I have no earthly idea what I meant to do, but I will fall in with your analysis! :D
Maybe I am just weak for stories that fuck with timelines, I dunno.
As you should be. What is the point of being in Who fandom if not to read stories that fuck with timelines more than the show does? Well, aside from the porn.
Actually, this is one of the only fics involving Peri that I really like, so congratulations.
I hadn't read it before; it's quite well-written, and a good character study of Peri. Unfortunately, since she's a character I don't particularly like, the story wasn't exactly my thing. I can appreciate it for its quality (and the lovely geeky bits), but sadly am not its target audience.
how he used his whole hand the time he tried to kill her or the way she'd kept remembering it all through the first time he had her until she came so hard he panicked This image has stuck with me ever since you posted this the other day (Why it didn't the first time I read the story, I don't know. Perhaps I missed it.), to the point that I may have to write draw my own version of the scenario. I'll comment here when/if I've done it, though of course you'll see it on your flist page.
I've got to say, an image like that in triangles would fill me with glee. Actually, even in your drawn cartoon style it would be unbelievably disturbing. So, yes, if the spirit ever moves you, please do link me up.
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I like those lines quite a lot, actually; in fact, that whole section may be my favorite part of the story, because it shows how much the timeline is in flux. I think that's why those last three lines work well -- for me they reflect the way the timestream is skipping around. And that's exactly what you meant to do, right? RIGHT?
It is like losing track of which cock goes where only with grammar instead of body parts.
I may need a t-shirt with this written on it, just so you know.
Not sure I like the "Three flips back:"
You'd be wrong about that. It works perfectly.
I think I like that section.
The "I tried/I'm trying/I'll try" section is probably my second-favorite bit, again because it is all about the undetermined timeline. Maybe I am just weak for stories that fuck with timelines, I dunno.
Well, nonelvis, I bet you wish it hadn't, anyway.
Actually, this is one of the only fics involving Peri that I really like, so congratulations.
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I have no earthly idea what I meant to do, but I will fall in with your analysis! :D
Maybe I am just weak for stories that fuck with timelines, I dunno.
As you should be. What is the point of being in Who fandom if not to read stories that fuck with timelines more than the show does? Well, aside from the porn.
Actually, this is one of the only fics involving Peri that I really like, so congratulations.
Have you read On the Study of Shatter-Resistant Materials, by eve11? Is it gorgeous. I absolutely adore that fic; v. worth checking out.
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how he used his whole hand the time he tried to kill her or the way she'd kept remembering it all through the first time he had her until she came so hard he panicked
This image has stuck with me ever since you posted this the other day (Why it didn't the first time I read the story, I don't know. Perhaps I missed it.), to the point that I may have to write draw my own version of the scenario. I'll comment here when/if I've done it, though of course you'll see it on your flist page.
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At the moment I have a script for a cartoon version, but there's a niggle in the back of my head that this may need to be done in prose.
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Here's what I came up with. Not what I set out for at all, but explanation for that is included.
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