Sundered Faith, Part Three (1/3)

[elfhawk]

And now for the cat fight. (No seriously, that's totally what I labeled the section as when I realized the argument was getting away from me.)
Updated 12/10/11

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[carmenwoods]

Hi, Vister!
“I can understand why you insist on traveling together. You're all obviously insane and have to keep each other in check. Should we take only the sorceress, we will likely return to find the village in shambles.”
lols.

Lesson for the day: never underestimate an elf.

Bahahaha, the return of the Rock! Most excellent.

[elfhawk]

My favorite part is him asking if they could leave the feral one behind. It makes me smile. (I was also trying to show that Petra is not the most stable of personalities. Did it work? Not too over the top? Not too out of nowhere? She did a similar thing with the troll, and then a bit with Odette and the *entire room being on fire*.)

The Rock needed a mention. It was hilarious.

[pariahsdream]

I loved that bit too. And the fact Petra was going to be the fierce one- sure she annoys and gets annoyed by her girls but NOBODY gets to do the same. <3

Also I love Odette being all smart and stuff. Well her and Petra.

And Athena not liking village fashions. That made me giggle. I think I may have to do some sketches of the girls again.

[carmenwoods]

The "link" button looks a lot like a "like" button. I keep reaching for it.

[carmenwoods]

[Next to Odette’s clean gray walking dress]
(No typos here, I just wanted to mention that I suddenly imagined Odette having determined how to adapt Petra's water-be-gone spell to take care of road dust too, and I had a good grin over it.)

Did Vister and the jerks have horses?

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Either their investigator hadn't turned found them or he had hidden them.

I decided to downplay it unless we ran into more troubles with the Jadens.” She eyed the ashen-faced knights. “Which now it has.”

“But it will be at least three days before their energy levels will be up for physical exertions,

and that will only be if I can get one a few of those strapping farm lads to tie Carmen down
(I thought about leaving out the last bit of that snippet, but humor won out over dignity. Sorry, Carmen. :3 )

“The it is just as well we are not leaving right away as I had planned,”

“Then why did you insist on putting up so much of a fuss-” Tae started.

[elfhawk]

I think every sorceress and wizard knows that spell. At least the ones worried about their looks

[carmenwoods]

Sorry - what I meant by that one is that I thought it ought to be "up to physical exertion(singular)". But that may just be my sentence structure bias showing.

The bold did was supposed to indicate it should be added in - the sentence as it is doesn't have a did. (“Then why you insist on putting up so much of a fuss-” Tae started.) I just can't draw arrows and carrots and things in a text field. Sorry. D:

[elfhawk]

No, I figured out your pretend grammar symbols. I just don't see how did adds anything to the sentence. Maybe it's just I read flowery historical fiction as opposed to your nautical historical fiction, but it doesn't look to me like it needs a helping verb there. Petra insists on putting up a fuss. She did insist on making a fuss in that room, yes, but Tae is also speaking of the fact that, when they meet up with Carmen and Athena, she will *still* insist on fussing about the matter. She really doesn't like the sun-knights. (Nor anybody else who stands as 'the man.' She is against the man. The man is boring and patriarchal and bossy and will arrest her if she's caught breaking and entering again.)

[carmenwoods]

“With me are Gethin and Barrett, knights from the temple of Jadus in Reeds.
(Being from Reeds, will G&B share Edric's speech patterns, or was he posted in Khoresbar from somewhere else that has that dialect? Does Ailith share that dialect too?)

“And Lightbringer Roland was famously known for his charity and mercy before he disappeared,”
(So, Lightbringer Roland died (as far as we know) investigating the trolls and all. Did he die of good old fashioned "being overwhelmed by enemies", or was there any horror movie-esque "the evil god has just cut off your access to magic, now die" involved? Just something I wondered about reading through this time.)

[elfhawk]

I have no idea what orphanage Edric and Ailith grew up in. I figured they got moved to Khorevail basically as soon the Jadens noticed Ailith had the gift of foresight. (Hot comodity, that. Especially since the goddess didn't always play well with her counterpart about such things.) They would've totally tried to be subtle-like and just closed whatever orphanage for lack of funding and moved everyone to one of the capital's orphanages.

The more subtle dialects, I think, would be lost in translation for the girls. Consider the American accent in foreign films. Or the British accent in our films. Without study, you can't tell the 6 different London accents apart, never mind the other 20 they've got. Just like the Brits don't notice the difference between Texan and Boston accents. So I don't think it's something I need worry about.

Lightbringer Roland is MIA, presumed dead. That is all anyone knows. I assumed he was dead when I wrote that, but who knows, maybe he'll turn out not to be dead. It'll be an adventure!