Fears - The Mentalist fanfic

[elen_nare]

Title: Fears
Fandom: The Mentalist
Rating: G
Length: 996 words
Author's notes: For the September Challenge at Paint It Red (prompt: fifth random song, in this case "Missing" by Eliza Doolittle). Unbeta'ed - concrit most welcome! Spoilers for 2x08, 4x24.
Summary: “I came to see you when there's no use pretending / Let's hope it's a happier ending” (

Comments

[bluealoe]

I really love the dialogue in this story. The quick back and forth, the way they seem to almost read each other's thoughts, the difference between the beginning banter and the way they talk when the subject turns serious. It's really well-done.

Passion? Why had she said that? Caring, she'd meant to say.
Oops. A bit of a slip. ;)

I want you to think about it, really think about it, let yourself believe I might be right, then tell me what you honestly think.
That's definitely getting to the heart of the situation...good for him.

“I promised you once I'd always save you, Teresa. That's still true. It will always be true.”
AWWWWW!!!!!

The ending is adorable. I can see the beginnings of a romance, but it's not rushed..it's two friends who really care about each other.

[elen_nare]

Thank you for reviewing!

I'm glad you liked the dialogue, it was fun to write :)

Oops. A bit of a slip. ;)
Quite ;) She's lucky Jane is so focussed on worrying about Red John, or he'd have jumped on that and teased her until she kicked him out of the office.

“I promised you once I'd always save you, Teresa. That's still true. It will always be true.”
AWWWWW!!!!!
:D That was pretty much my reaction to his original promise in canon, lol.

I can see the beginnings of a romance, but it's not rushed
That really makes me happy, because these two wouldn't - and shouldn't! - rush into anything, but I really think they'll wind up together in the end. (And if they don't, there's always fanfic, right? :P)