Comments | electrictoad: what slips beneath the cracks

sanjihan in electrictoad

what slips beneath the cracks

Aug 03, 2011 22:30

Title: what slips beneath the cracks
Pairing/Group: Koyama/Shige (platonic), Ryo/Massu, Tegoshi/Yamashita
Rating: PG-13
Words: 5,900
Warnings: AU, different social constructions
Summary: "It feels... normal. Which is a sobering thought, one that follows Koyama to bed as he lies awake. He wonders when he'll stop thinking that it's 'normal', and ( Read more... )

c: shige, p: tegoshi/yamapi, c: ryo, c: tegoshi, au, collaboration, c: yamapi, fic challenge/exchange repost, r: pg-13, p: koyama/shige, c: koyama, p: massu/ryo, #one-shot, c: massu

Comments 4

rietje_1 August 5 2011, 23:43:01 UTC

Exchange or not, still, I'm impressed with all these fast updates. (Yes, they are for me!) This goes for the group, but do they have the fic reposted? Then I could try commenting over there as well.

I definitely liked it. The black/white/(fading into) grey element for each sidestory was nice. The doubts and everyone's inner turmoil was so powerful, and gave a good insight into their mindframes. I like how in each pairing, they grew closer and got something out of the time spent together. And the issue of when a relationship starts counting, that it only does when you act upon it in public, it's such a common theme, but looked at in a different way for all of them.

"(though he could have lived without the tiny cupcakes with pink icing hearts... Koyama, however, coos over them.)" Had to quote that line. I just had to, haha. It made me laugh, but also... such contrast. Amazing. <3

sanjihan August 6 2011, 19:25:52 UTC

lol. Totally for you. XD I don't see that rockthecliche has posted it yet and she's the only one I wrote it with. (When we had the third we were writing something different that was just too big for only Joce and I to write when Zoe had to step out.)

I'm glad you saw that. <3 It was definitely a challenge to write but I think we made it into something we could enjoy. I'm so happy you enjoyed it. <3 Thank you!

meissa August 20 2011, 08:44:00 UTC

Very interesting concept, black and white blending into grey, the inner conflicts, the individual voices -- all of it coming together into a really beautifully written fic. Ah, but then there's always something quietly beautiful in most of your and Joce's individual fics.

I also like how, despite a theme that could potentially be heavy and (lol) grey, it comes off somehow lighter.

sanjihan August 20 2011, 19:42:17 UTC

The ones that aren't utter crack, anyway. XD Seriously, though, thank you. <3 We had an interesting time keeping it light and serious all at once, so I'm glad to hear we pulled it off. Thank you again!

(hehe, your icon matches my comm colors so well... so pretty. XD)