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elder_bonnie

The Rose Window

Jul 15, 2010 15:06

Title: The Rose Window
Pairing: Perry/Harry
Word count: 2331
Rating: PG
Warnings: Character death
Summary: Take a closer look.
A/N: This is my first attempt at a Listening Fic, as inspired by theskyeskye. The music I submerged myself in was the entire soundtrack to A Single Man. I think the track I listened to the most, however, was this one: "Clock Tick" ( Read more... )

character: perry van shrike, character: harmony faith lane, the rose window, character: harry lockhart, fic, kiss kiss bang bang, fanfic

Comments 34

darkravenkiki July 15 2010, 23:44:58 UTC

/wibble/

:( :( :(

elder_bonnie July 16 2010, 05:23:02 UTC

((hugs&squishes))

I luff u

darkravenkiki July 16 2010, 16:29:11 UTC

<3 I luff you too! <3

NOW, PLEASE DON'T KILL HARRY IN CRASH.

...please? D:

elder_bonnie July 16 2010, 19:26:29 UTC

( ... )

silver_autumn July 16 2010, 05:10:38 UTC

AHH! SADNESS! I can see how this would come from listening to the 'Single Man' soundtrack. I love the music but I find my thought processes are always so gloomy after listening to it.

Sad, but VERY Good. I give this the cinemathree stamp of approval! I don't really have any negative criticsim. ummm The one paragraph that starts "inside the church.." is a bit of a beast. I mean, it's rather long. If you could break it up some that might make reading it a bit easier.

Other then that, its great! :D

elder_bonnie July 16 2010, 05:19:52 UTC

..."'inside the church..' is a bit of a beast."

Haha xD No, you're definitely right. I was thinking that while typing it up earlier, noticing that it had taken up almost half the page on my word processor. Lemme fix that up.

I really appreciate you reading it ^^ Your opinion means a lot to me. And (c)cinemathree's stamp, OMG! Now I KNOW it's legit xD

by the by -
When you read through it, did you have any assumptions as to who was dead? Or, rather, was it obvious?

(and p.s. - you don't have skype or aim do you?)

silver_autumn July 17 2010, 07:04:02 UTC

I had a hard time figuring out who was the deceased- well the church full of people gave me clues. Did you want that fact to be elusive? Because it was done very well!

elder_bonnie July 17 2010, 07:38:45 UTC

Win! ^^
And I like your icon very much! :D

pallorxmortis July 16 2010, 06:35:09 UTC

I agree with Kristina!

/wibble/

:( So wonderfully written but SO SAD!
I love the music though.

elder_bonnie July 16 2010, 19:44:27 UTC

awww, here's some for you too

((hugs&squishes))

Thank you. That whole soundtrack just makes me collapse into a hopeless, useless pile of emotion every time I listen to it <3<3

pallorxmortis July 16 2010, 19:58:08 UTC

Squeeee!
I just catch glimpses of the end and I'm like: FFFFFF! SSOO SAD.

wolfishinsanity July 16 2010, 08:13:10 UTC

ugh, this was fantastic. ♥

Also, the ending surprised me! I really thought it had been Harry who had died. Was that intended, or am I just thick?

elder_bonnie July 16 2010, 19:29:37 UTC

Thank you! <3
And it was definitely intended. I want people to be surprised, and I'm so glad it read that way. I was worried I hadn't completely pulled it off.
Thanks a ton for reading! ^^

mothergoddamn July 16 2010, 12:25:30 UTC

I never read character death but since YOU wrote it I knew this would be good. This is beautiful! Every part of it just works! I don't know why but the description of Harmony's clothes and her usual love for colours I especially love. Very well done!

elder_bonnie July 16 2010, 19:31:39 UTC

aw, gosh, thanks <3<3<3<3
I often hate reading character death and try to avoid it, but when your muse hits you, what can you do? You're at its mercy.