"Bingo" Prologue

[el_kitano]

Title: Bingo
Author: El Kitano
Rating: R for ninja language and ninja violence
Summary: In the time directly following the Uchiha massacre, an ANBU team consisting of Kakashi, Gai, and Tenzou is deployed to search for the missing-nin Itachi Uchiha. Unknown to all but a select few, the mission is really a sham in order to provide cover for Danzou's

Comments

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[jbadgr]

OMG that was amaaaaazing! Shikaku- ugh that scene was effing heartbreaking. Totes going to draw that scene and Kakashi harassing pretty much everyone ever.

Go write ch1 now. Now. NOW!

Re: FFFFFFFFFFF :D

[el_kitano]

YAY I'm soooo glad you like it because if you didn't, that would have been incredibly depressing. As for the next chap, I'm trying but it's hard cuz I'm cold and I really want Chinese food. :( I'll try and focus my youthful energy more effectively. Also, we're watching The Two Towers so it may come out a little Tokien-esque. Tenzo might have to creep around, following Kakashi and Gai, trying to steal Kakashi's pr0n hissing, "precioussssss"

[jamminbison]

I've been wanting to read this since (I guess your sister?) posted up the preview image! This just drew me in and kept me going and now I can't wait for more. You have a insta-fan!

[el_kitano]

:D Yay! Yes, she is my sister. I'm glad you're enjoying it so far!

[jamminbison]

Now for a less spastic reply -

I REALLY like your characterizations. Everyone was SPOT ON and I found myself snickering at a lot of the jokes that come much naturally here than in a lot of other fics where there's heavy character interaction. Your descriptions are detailed enough to lay the scene and not confuse the reader, but leave enough to the imagination for me to have some fun with the mystery of the scene, especially a creepy one like a room full of dead people and Root HQ.

[el_kitano]

OMG I love your comments, you are wonderful. <3

[el_kitano]

Thanks for the compliments! On the last point I definitely agree (obviously, lol) My general rule is, if it's in English in the English manga and dub, then I use the English. If it's in Japanese in the manga and dub, I use Japanese (names, places, some seals). It makes my life a lot easier. The only time it gets tricky is when I'm using jutsu and such from parts in the anime that have yet to be dubbed. >.> but I'll try my best to stay consistent.

Thanks again for reading!!

[ashleyperry]

wow! Your writing is extremely good! I'm very impressed! One of the best fan fictions I've read [though my first Naruto fan fic I've read]. Good job! Can't wait for the next chapter!

[el_kitano]

wow! That's quite a compliment--thank you so much!!!

[wind_hover]

I like the way Shikaku's arm is twisted into keeping silent (good cop, bad cop by Hokage and Danzo)- and the emotion Shikaku faces over when he holds Shikamaru.

The cover art is wonderful.

And the unconcious boy Shikaku drops when he attacks Danzo? That's Sai, isn't it?

While we're on Shikaku-
"With a blind hand he grabbed a towel from the counter. He wiped what he could of the crusted blood from his face and tossed the rag in the trash"
-Towel becomes a rag?

The way Kakashi manipulates people around him is hilarious- nice contrast from the beginning with Shikaku. :)

Shikaku is Itachi's contact? Is that planned?

Ah well, will find out later. Looking forward to the next chapter.

[el_kitano]

I'm glad you're going to stick around for the next chapter!

The boy may have been Sai... I like to leave that up to the reader. Maybe you hate appearances by Sai, in which case no--it's not Sai. If you love Sai, sure--it's Sai.

Thanks for pointing out the towel to rag transformation jutsu. As the fic is now, it's in progress. When it's complete it will be posted on fanfic and other places. Thanks again for pointing that out.

I don't want to give away too much!

Thanks again,
Best,
El