I am enjoying this story and look forward to more :)
Just a couple of things having to do with tense issues (I still make them myself, so no worries). Here: "Leave it be, I will drop them in one of his drawers the other day when he doesn´t notice.” It should be "I will drop them in one his drawers some day when he won't notice" or something like that. And here: "that he used to know for nearly 20 years." Should be something like "that he has known for nearly 20 years."
If you are ever in need of a quick beta, I am usually online. I use AIM and my sn is arhh76 and MSN IM autumnrain_76@msn.com Give me a shout if I am online and I could probably do a quick beta for you :)
Oh, I had goosebumps when you described the melody Amber was playing on the piano. I was thinking it had to be House's composition, and couldn't wait to read further to find out. Very touching.
What a nice coincidence that Wilson and Stacy have the same last initial.
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Just a couple of things having to do with tense issues (I still make them myself, so no worries). Here: "Leave it be, I will drop them in one of his drawers the other day when he doesn´t notice.” It should be "I will drop them in one his drawers some day when he won't notice" or something like that. And here: "that he used to know for nearly 20 years." Should be something like "that he has known for nearly 20 years."
If you are ever in need of a quick beta, I am usually online. I use AIM and my sn is arhh76 and MSN IM autumnrain_76@msn.com Give me a shout if I am online and I could probably do a quick beta for you :)
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I would love to have you as a beta, I think I will soon contact you.
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The 13/Amber part will be next and it is really getting ugly...
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What a nice coincidence that Wilson and Stacy have the same last initial.
I'm eager for more.
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Goosebumps was exactly what I tried to evoke with it.
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