The Snare 2/2

[egalitarianmuse]

Author:  Regency
Title:  The Snare
Rating:  PG-13 for a bit of cursing.
Pairing:  Neal/Peter/Elizabeth, implied Neal/Kate
Spoilers:  General series, but with particular spoilers for Free Fall (1.07) & Hard Sell (1.08).
Warnings: Sap and regret. Unusual injury. Character death.
Word Count:  ~ 4,225
Summary:  The final showdown between Neal, Peter, and

Comments

[b_scholes]

Oh got that was so wonderfully dark. I actually thought one of them was done for. And Neal and Elle trying to comfort each other, knowing that it wasn't working but being glad that they were there.

Neal so lost without his Peter.

And a happy ending. I do love a happy ending.

[egalitarianmuse]

I'm so glad. I love a happy ending, too, but this story almost had a sad ending. I couldn't decide who, if anyone, should live.

Thank you for reading and enjoying.

stands up to a slow second reading

[ursula4x]

I gobbled all the stories down so quickly, but this one stuck as one of the stories I will read more than once, more than twice.

The twin predictments of Neal and Peter mirrored El, safe, but alone without them.

I have to admire your inventiveness. I have never read either danger in a story.

Also extra bonus point for realizing horrible injuries like Peter's are not always fatal. Sometimes horrible looking injuries are survived.

I am also very glad Peter knew enough to leave the harpoon alone. Objects puncturing like that must be left in place for surgeons to remove.

Re: stands up to a slow second reading

[egalitarianmuse]

I'm really glad to hear it stands up to multiple readings. I hate when I go back to read something only to find it loses something that second time.

I have no idea where I got the harpoon idea from, but the sinking ship was definitely easier to come up with.

The inherent logic of Peter's character--and his good sense--made it easy to keep him from pulling out the harpoon. That and the fact that it would have hurt like a bitch. Oh, and it was planted in the deck. I can't even imagine trying to pull a harpoon out of the ground beneath me, then out of myself. No, there was no chance of him even trying that.

Thanks again for enjoying the story enough to read it again and review.

[surreal_44]

This was amazing. I loved the writing style. Fluid, dark but a touch of graveyard humor. The characters were spot on. Wonderfully done. I've read this twice on LJ and three times on ff.net.

I really, really hope to see more of your work!

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[egalitarianmuse]

I'm glad you've enjoyed the story so much. Like I was telling someone else, it's always reassuring when a story hold up to re-reading. I wasn't expecting anyone to like this, but I've been wonderfully surprised. Thank you for telling me. It gives my muse a huge boost to know that people are enjoying what I'm writing.

I can't wait to write more for White Collar. I already have two others on the burner right now. Hopefully, I'll finish those soon.

Re: Re-posted to undo a typo

[surreal_44]

I'm really looking forward to it. You've found the voice of the characters and your writing is so interesting. ^.^ May I add you to my flist so I can keep track of your fics?

Re: Re-posted to undo a typo

[egalitarianmuse]

Go for it. I'll add you right back if that's all right.

[nynine]

This is a wonderful fic. You show Neal's state of mind with such immediacy that I didn't relax at all until he was onshore again!

[egalitarianmuse]

Thank you so much! I really loved writing his part so I'm glad you enjoyed it as well.