Brigits_Flame Week One: Directions
Title: Directions
Prompt: Coast
For: brigits_flame
Rating: PG
Genre: Fiction
Word Count: 380
AN: Unbetaed, it is bound to have errors!
( Directions )
Prompt: Coast
For: brigits_flame
Rating: PG
Genre: Fiction
Word Count: 380
AN: Unbetaed, it is bound to have errors!
( Directions )
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Good luck this week! Look forward to reading more from you.
~Kate
BF Week One entry: "Clothes and all"
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I feel I rushed it too much though... I wrote and posted it within an hour before work on Sunday morning!
Just hope I get though so I can improve next week! :)
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I think the problem I had with this piece is that it is 90% autobiographical. I live in St. Ives and so I was trying to create an image of NYE (hence the switch between tenses!)
I like how you changed the piece, it defiantly feels stronger now the tense is continuous. :)
The second part of the piece (where you mentioned it becomes murkier) is more of a memory than a scene before me. In St. Ives the NYE party is always held on the harbor and surrounding streets.
The character sitting on the beach has escaped the mayhem for a few minutes! Her saying that other people would begin to walk home was a guess due to it getting later in the evening and because it was quieter rather than her seeing them leave. Does that make sense? I've had a busy day and I do tend to ramble!
I think it works better how you changed the second half however, especially... Of course, a few would linger in hope, desperately trying to extend the evening's shenanigans, and wanting to slow the following days' descent into normality ( ... )
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