FIC: Falling Together and Apart in Five Acts

[featherxquill]

(Mod fail! My apologies! I had two assignments to work on last night for handing in this morning, and thus totally forgot to post the entry before bed. Both of today's will go up in together)

Title: Falling Together and Apart in Five Acts
Author: ???
Pairing: Hermione/Pansy
Rating: R
Prompt: #9 - story of a failed relationship, told backwards

Comments

[woldy]

This is great and exactly what i hoped for when I left the prompt! Love how the themes of alcohol and verbal abuse runs through the story, and knowing how the relationship ends puts a completely different - and much darker - spin on the beginning of their relationship. The sense of doomed inevitability here is perfect, especially with that powerful final line. Great title too. I'll definitely be re-reading this :-)

[pavlablack]

This was amazing, and you handle the backwards storytelling so well. I love how the honest remorse of Pansy's letter and the whispered three words contrast with the cruelty and self-centeredness of her in the rest of the piece. And the ending is just perfect. Makes me sad they couldn't find a way to work things out, despite the dysfunctional nature of their relationship.

[sabethea]

Oh. Oh, Hermione. Oh, Pansy. So obviously wrong and yet irresistible. Wonderful.

[gamma_x_orionis]

I loved the way you told the story - the backwards storytelling was very interesting, but not at all hard to follow :D

[xonceinadream]

I could've sworn that I had reviewed this already. I truly love the way you told the story. Such great emotions and relationships. I loved it just as much on the reread.

[mione03]

I love this fic, i think this is incredible and the way you describe the relationship, the abuse and the remorse is amazing! I want read more about them and i'm really sad because the girls couldn't find a way to make this work! The contrast between the different parts the story is awesome! I'll be definitely re-read the fic! Congratulations!