Comments | dying_in_a_fire: my story i wrote...

dying_in_a_fire

my story i wrote...

Apr 08, 2005 00:05

yeah so i wrote this and just now finnished it up. it would help if you people would comment on it with constructive criticism...or just diss on it. whatever ( Read more... )

Comments 14

nire_chan April 8 2005, 15:43:41 UTC

Thas so sad ;_;...and you say you can't write...you write good you buttface! ^_^...what was your insperation o.O

*shrug* dying_in_a_fire April 8 2005, 21:41:31 UTC

i dunno...i was thinking about a pic from JTHM, and some junk from Hellsing...and a movie...and yeah. thanks for the comment. ^_^"

Re: *shrug* nire_chan April 10 2005, 05:45:08 UTC

damn good job anywho ^_^ keep it ups.

nokes April 8 2005, 16:51:09 UTC

wow thats depressing... hell of a good job though. but yeah as stated earlier we need to hang out if you want to do anything today(friday) it would probably be the only time for this spring break im available well keep on writing peace out

nokesy

gah! dying_in_a_fire April 8 2005, 21:42:57 UTC

i would love to hang out, but sadly, Lar has to work. but you could burn down the place so i would still get paid, but i wouldnt have to work. *wink* maybe some other time, if you would pencil me into your busy schedual! lol later

kymah April 8 2005, 23:22:59 UTC

hey, im not much of a reader its too long for meeee, but I just thought I would say hey to you.

hey dying_in_a_fire April 10 2005, 07:58:34 UTC

*waves* hi! yeah i know...it was alot of reading...

Re: hey kymah April 11 2005, 06:35:30 UTC

hey you, you need to give me your number so we can hang out or something, damn you. j/k

Re: hey dying_in_a_fire April 12 2005, 01:05:32 UTC

dude! i totaly already gave it to you! on myspace...oh well. here it is again...539-9321! marhar!

zurven April 8 2005, 23:49:21 UTC

Hell of a damned good writer. Sad like Erin said, heh.

read it again.. just.. wow

^_^" dying_in_a_fire April 10 2005, 07:55:58 UTC

heh...thanks! <3 <3 <3

nyght_rayn April 10 2005, 02:06:43 UTC

Hmmmm... what to say that hasn't been said...
It really is awesome, depressing and sad but awesome.
You have really good diction and voice...
You wanted constuctive criticism... umm... try some sentice variation for added emotional reponse like, thow in some short sentenses for more impact.
That's all I can think of...
it's really good

Love ya!

*_* dying_in_a_fire April 10 2005, 07:57:00 UTC

aww...sara i love you! thanks for the help..ill try and fix it. ^_^" hey we should hang out sometime!