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[je_talveran]

Title: Amberlight
Fandom: AU The Devil Wears Prada
Pairing: Miranda/Andy
Rating:Mature
Summary: A year after Paris, Andy has her life on track again, she's rocketing to success in her job at the Mirror and her freelance work has caused her to be taken under the wing of one of New York's elite writers. So, it's obvious that it's about time for fate to

Comments

[jintymac]

Thanks for updating so quickly :-)

This just keeps getting better & better and I really really want to know what happens next lol!

You're building up the suspense brilliantly so I hope you don't make us wait too long for the next installment :D

[kdsusa3]

I love this story. I am also sorry that you spent two nights in the ER. I hope everything is all right. I really like the fledgling relationship between Miranda and Andy. Not to mention the fact that Miranda hinted at bringing Andy over. Update when you have the chance, which I hope is soon.

[radak]

great part. thanks. And I hope you are all right.

[nikim]

This is really good so far. Can't wait to see where it's headed.

[mercurychkita]

You've got me hooked! You're setting this story up quite nicely, almost teasing us with small glimpses here and there. I liked the insight into Andy's home life, and her apparent loneliness is in stark contrast to the lively girl we usually see. Miranda was a bit of a tease in this installment, I thought - berating Elizabeth and the doctor for keeping Andy in the dark, but then not telling her any more information. But I've got a feeling she's looking out for her, at the very least.

The descriptions in your storytelling are really vivid, and certainly help to place the reader right into the thick of the setting. Ooh, and that last line was great for building suspense. I'm really looking forward to where you take this!

If you're interested in a beta reader, I'd be happy to help out - just send me a message.

[je_talveran]

The descriptions are vivid? Really? *blush*

I always think that they're too stark and minimalistic and don't do anything to put the reader into the scene, of course, that's from a creative writing teacher who thought less was best.

[mercurychkita]

I thought so. Not necessarily in terms of physical descriptions, but also emotional or the kind that sets the tone. This part in particular stood out for me:

The engine was practically purring as they wound down the road. Miranda looked comfortable behind the wheel and as they put miles between them and Elizabeth's property, she started to relax, bit by bit. The silence between them lost it's tension.

And there was also the bit where she's struggling with her key (it was almost tangible, and just sort of so mundane and REAL) and then of course her introspection about the space in her apartment - which of course acted as a jumping-off point to show how lonely she is, and also gave an excuse to get her outside.

I guess what I'm trying to say is that descriptions don't necessarily need to be adjective-laden and visually descriptive in order to give a feel for the setting.