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To Those Who Wait: fic for the unexpected sweetness challenge

Aug 21, 2010 12:45

Title: To Those Who Wait
Authors: exbex and prudence_dearly
Pairing: Ray/Ray
Genre: kidfic
Length: 2453 words
A/N: Piles of thanks to my beta cum co-author Pru, without whom this story would have remained on the unfinished pile indefinitely. \Pru/
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sweetness challenge

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comment - to those who wait tres_mechante August 21 2010, 20:30:27 UTC

Oh...this is sweet in the best possible way. You sketched a beautiful picture, just enough detail to understand the context without actually overwhelming with detail.

*applauds*

A delightful use of the prompt. Thank you so much for sharing this!

Re: comment - to those who wait exbex August 21 2010, 23:59:58 UTC

Thank you so much *g* It took Pru's shrewd eyes to pare the fic down to a good size.

mizface August 21 2010, 21:05:35 UTC

Love this, exbex and pru. It's quiet and gentle and yes, sweet but in a realistic and not cloying way. You've chosen such lovely moments to share with us.

As a mom of young kidlets, I'm finding that when it's written well, kidfic with the child growing up reminds me how soon my own will be leaving the nest. This is no exception, and it's with a tear in my eye that I write this. But that's a good thing - it means you've written it in a way that touched my heart.

exbex August 22 2010, 00:02:09 UTC

\o/

akite August 24 2010, 14:17:28 UTC

*sighs* Ah, due South, the only fandom that I love the kidfic. You guys did it good. *g*

exbex August 25 2010, 03:34:51 UTC

You think I should scrap the my Joe/Billy mpreg kidfic?

akite August 25 2010, 10:57:01 UTC

Bwa-ha-ha! No, actually, sounds like a hoot to me.

exbex August 27 2010, 03:47:15 UTC

I was totally joking, but the more I think about it, the more intrigued I am...

peoriapeoria August 25 2010, 00:31:06 UTC

This was fun. I think kidfic is easier in dS, in that its problems are rather like real life, even if its solutions aren't. Wonder how they did on that finding Benny someone...

exbex August 25 2010, 03:36:51 UTC

Thank you *g* I agree. As far as Fraser, I'm going to assume that he settled down with someone and adopted four children.

thursdaynext_27 August 26 2010, 04:51:07 UTC

This was lovely, a good mix of sweet and funny.

He felt a tightness in his chest. He crossed his arms and squeezed his eyes shut, breathing deeply, trying not to let the tears fall. He had decided long ago that good was not something that came to him. This was a long time coming.

exbex August 27 2010, 03:48:36 UTC

*g* Thank you.