Apology Challenge: "The Gray Menace" by keerawa

[keerawa]

Title: The Gray Menace
Author: keerawa
Characters: Ray K, Ray V
Rating: PG
Length: 500 words
Thanks to: My betas, akamine_chan and Steven, for reminding me that other people do not live in my head.
Disclaimer: The characters belong to Alliance/Atlantis. I just feed them when they follow me home.
Warnings: Do I need to warn for odd and mildly dystopian future-fic

Comments

[j_s_cavalcante]

Ahahahahaha!

“Grays’re bringing it in through the ports, overland … drawing pensions off the sweat of us working stiffs, and spending all their hard currency on those damn Canadian meds. Fucking leeches.”

Hilarious! *admires your shiny brain*

[keerawa]

IDK where my brain was going with this one, JS. Apparently my Muses wanted to address the coming healthcare crisis? There's a whole rather dark reality out there with no purpose but for the Rays to have an arguement in the car. *shakes head*

[j_s_cavalcante]

Hee! Well, I like your use of it, and actually I think it's a very constructive response. I have my own rather radical thoughts on this "crisis" and I think in the long run there will be a positive outcome.

Also, I think other people do live in your head. So, you know, YMMV, and you have every right and are probably well advised to take anything I say with a grain of salt. :) Except that you're a fabulous writer with an amazing imagination. That point, I'm sure, is beyond dispute. :)

[cyberducks]

Ha! Your brain is slightly eeeevil....although it's quite disconcerting thinking of the not so glorious future.

And Fraser sighting at the end!

[keerawa]

It is a rather unpleasant future. Glad you enjoyed the tour around my evil brain.

[prudence_dearly]

I'm crazy about the opening words
Two white males sat arguing in a green classic car
I just LOVE seeing the boys when they're old. Not just older but old. This is such a fun glimpse! (I am in favour of futuristic dystopias :)

[keerawa]

*grins* Thanks, prudence_dearly!

[china_shop]

Vecchio peered at her. “Either way, she earns more than you,” he concluded. “Six o’clock, guy in red trying to hold the automatic door open for all the senior citizens. Nut job, or just Canadian?”

Awww! Fraser turning up lightens even the bleakest of dystopias. I love the Rays, all old and cantankerous. ♥

[keerawa]

He does! Old and cantankerous, young and cantankerous - basically, they're cantankerous.

[luzula]

Do I need to warn for odd and mildly dystopian future-fic with absolutely no sex?

Absolutely not! I want more fic like this.

I love how this feels like just a little piece of something bigger. Hmm, Grays. What are they? My best guess was that Grays = guys in gray suits = people who are well-off, but I don't know.

And Fraser at the end = &hearts

[keerawa]

Think gray-haired. The Gray Panthers were an elder rights organization founded in 1970. This dystopia has a radicalization of older Americans.

*hugs Fraser* Thanks, luzula!

[luzula]

Oh, okay! Interesting.