TEAM WHIMSY: Day 5, "The Heart's Compass"

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Title: The Heart's Compass
Author: zabira
Team: Whimsy
Prompt: "Some people don't know the meaning of team spirit."
Pairing(s): Fraser/Kowalski
Length: 7,500 words
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Canon character death.
Summary: To his eternal frustration, he still can't control his traveling, hasn't been able to—not once—in all the years this has been happening

Comments

[petronelle]

Ray's superpower of being able to stalk the ones he loves -- including the GTO -- through space and time fits him beautifully. I love his voice and the choices he makes, holding off on getting Fraser tangled up in his affection until he has to admit that they're already enmeshed.

[zabira]

i'm so glad you think it suits rayk. he does get ATTACHED, doesn't he?

and thank you for so eloquently articulating THIS bit:

holding off on getting Fraser tangled up in his affection until he has to admit that they're already enmeshed.

&hearts

[teaphile]

That ending is perfectly right. Fraser's too broken for anything more. Kudos.

And Steve, ha!

[zabira]

awww, teaphile, i am so glad that it felt right to you. \o/

[raucousraven]

Oh, lovely. Little Ben is heartbreaking.

[zabira]

oh, thank you! *puts heart back together*

[mondschein1]

Oh, God, that was good. It's a story that relies on the supernatural to tell, but isn't telling a story about the supernatural. It's just using the supernatural to develop the characters into these wonderful, gorgeous deep things.

Fraser is cautious in unexpected ways. Ben runs toward everything.

Just, so succinct. Everything about wee!Ben was adorable, but that sentence just summed up what Caroline's death did to him.

Fantastic job.

[zabira]

i was so floored by this comment, because that's EXACTLY what i hoped for my story: that the magic wouldn't feel arbitrary, and would support the characters. i'm SO very glad you thought so.

(and OMG, thank you x 1,000 for the rec in your journal. i was VERY touched by that. &hearts)

[raggedass_road]

BOOM! THAT WAS AWESOME! This fic just laid the SMACKDOWN! Eat it, Team Reality! BIFF! POW! THWOCK!

No, seriously. This one gets my vote for best of the match so far. I loved the kid Benton and the time-traveling concept and just the execution of the whole thing. Fraser still having the glove was brilliant. God, this is just one of those stories I wish I had written, it's got everything. Just the right kind of emotion and drama and deft language and a pitch-perfect fantasy element.

BIG WIN, this one. <3

[zabira]

HEEEEEEEEE!!! you made me SMILE ALL DAY with this comment!

i admire your writing so much, and it's sort of mind-boggling to think of you wishing you'd written something of mine. and i am SO glad all the elements worked for you.